The Devil's Retrospect

[RareForm]

I explore around this dank cramped place,
Towering metal walls cave in above,
My own profound reflection in the rings of crafted metal,
Of what I once was.

A smile rests comfortably on my face,
My past happiness, bothering me now,
The ability of a skill long gone, worn away,
Optimism my deceitful companion.

Fidgeting in my conformed prison cell,
I observe you externally, quietly mourning,
For my ashes sit within this smooth urn,
Silently, solitarily watching.

 

[Pantomime7]

Love it! Keep writing my friend

 

[DarkPoet]

"My past happiness, bothering me now,"

what a great line

 

[human paraquat]

i like this, a lot.

 

[Altered_Soul9]

Awesome man. Amazing on all levels. Very Nice

 

[cherub]

okay so you said it was good? nahh more like amazing like he said above..... disturbing at the same time.

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

Very nice bro. I like the last part:
"Fidgeting in my conformed prison cell,
I observe you externally, quietly mourning,
For my ashes sit within this smooth urn,
Silently, solitarily watching."
It ends so smoothly like a dream or something.

 

[PhorIndicator]

I love this piece.