The amateur butcher.

[up all night]

This is the sound of a filtered life
when cold cuts of emotional meat
are placed on display.
Vengeance is sworn
like an auctioneer with a sell sell sell mentality
who breaks all the rules just to be safe.

I slit my wrists for you
and let my blue blood congeal
on surfaces made for the dramatic presentation
of hearts and kidneys and steaks.

So when the vicious onlookers
tap their fingers on the glass
I sit up straight and arrange my face
into an expression I wish my eyes were saying.

I am a police sketch of a criminal in shadows
and I'm sorry about the mess.

 

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

Originally posted by up all night
This is the sound of a filtered life
when cold cuts of emotional meat
are placed on display

^Biting.
This one seared my thoughts..amazing write, yet again.

-=Hugs tightly=-
I'm offering whatever condolence / support text on a screen can give.

 

[onetwothreefour]

wow...

this needs to be at the top of the page. i wish i could offer more relevant remarks.

 

[neverwas]

*hugs*

awesome work. ur writting has something that a lot of people lack or are always trying to find.

loved this section:

I am a police sketch of a criminal in shadows
and I'm sorry about the mess.

 

[Raz]

I am a police sketch of a criminal in shadows
and I'm sorry about the mess.

I don't know what the word is for the feeling these lines evoke...it kind of makes me want to give you a hug but keep my distance at the same time.

Great work!

 

[onetwothreefour]

^^^ she's scary but evocative (i don't know if that's a word, but if provocative is then it should be).

i shouldn't ost here now

 

[onetwothreefour]

i5's so a word. i am stupid man.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Big hugs on a wonderfully raw and emotional piece.

 

[TiberCross]

maybe you could be a prose-artist for the police. i especially enjoyed the dark metaphor that this was. what that metaphor relates to? i don't know. but it sounds and reads pretty damn well.

 

[up all night]

I think we all have dark moments and then we drink a lot and things become okay again.

Much love to all of you, especially 1234.

 

[Pomplemous]

*jaw drops to floor*

Ooh - I am jealous of that writing - i wish I'd written that!! (note: fear not, I am deadly against plaigarism so I wont pinch it incase you worried from that kind of enthusiasm)

 

[raverchik]

beautiful Yarni

 

[cherub]

your writting is always impressive this is no different, I always have a way of relating to your writting.

great stuff girlie !

 

[up all night]

I don't think I've ever bumped a piece of my own before but I was going through some old writing and found this.

Fuck. This is how I feel today. I already miss him. I feel so exposed.

 

[lostNfound]

you have an amazing mind.
your words do a better job than any set of eyes.
I feel as though youve brought me inside your headspace to cower in the very same corner with you, here in the dark.
awesome

 

[Mary Poppins]

fantastic piece, and i think it's great that you can revisit your work and still connect with it so powerfully.

though not i guess, feelings that i'd be wishing you to have

regardless - sublime words - what i've come to expect from you.

 

[m4dd0g]

"cold cuts of emotional meat"

Wow UAN

Sorry for your pain
*hugs*

 

[yakksoho]

I slit my wrists for you
and let my blue blood congeal
on surfaces made for the dramatic presentation
of hearts and kidneys and steaks.

my this is quite excellent

 

[Cosmic Mist]

Your writing is amazing...

This really is how i feel today.

Wow.

*hugs*