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superman lies bleeding

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My apologies - I have no other way of expressing this.
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superman lies bleeding
his body slumped on the river bank
red and blue against the snow

i have killed him

plucked a long sharp shard of kryptonite
grown solid over many lonely nights
and struck it deep into his heart

cut the curl from his hair
{the curl the girls would love to kiss}
let it run downstream with his bright red cape
watched it move and creep over the rocks

goodbye, to you

but as each thin snowflake landed gently on his face
i watched the light slowly fade from my eyes
with my last breath i mouthed WHY?


and as his tears hit my cheeks my mortal killer answered:

i cannot be you any more
i have lost so much in saving others
when i should have been saving myself

this pain has consumed me
and what little strength i have
i must use to walk away

the hero must die
just an ordinary man can remain
and this plain plastic man must learn
that he has to be enough

:(
 
wow! this was perfect...I think alot of people can relate with this...

another great write Dastrix! :)
 
that is probably the best oeice of yours i have read in a long time :) i loved the use of imagery. i felt like i was there watching what was going on.

excellent work hunny :)
 
damn you. your writing is so good!.. i love each peice ive ever read of yours. and i just like them more everytime i read them.

keep on keepin on.
 
Wow, superman finally got stabbed to death -- a sorry end to a life of secret perversion. This poem is fantastic, rock on.
 
I love it! Simple yet so deep in meaning. I relate to this fully. Searching for the person you need to be opposed to who you are and learning that you were who you wanted to be all along. Great writing!
 
Theres a lot of anger in the beginning of this and then it sort of turns introspective, I liked the imagery and the meaning a lot!

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the hero must die
just an ordinary man can remain
and this plain plastic man must learn
that he has to be enough
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I had variations of this thought so many times, this however is the perfect way to put it...

incindentally.. i DESPISE super-heroes... ;)





skjalff
 
You never cease to amaze, Dastrix. I'm thrilled to see someone mix it up a bit. Great write.
 
I like the way you make the reader figure out what is happening, but ultimately expalin it for those who didn't quite figure it out for themselves.

Doubleplus points for you my friend... :)
 
You have such a distinctive style, yet at the same time, every piece I read of yours is fresh and original - this is great.

Rather prophetic it seems too ;)
 
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