Stone & Resonance.

[rewiiired]

Blanket the earth, smother the fire,
whisper secrets to me as they scatter like leaves,
burying the wretched turbulence beneath
the calm, fluid masque,

always you sought to smooth
out any ripples that might betray
as you see no virtue in free skin

and here I am, twisted again,
desperately needing something more than this,
achingly seeking the stone, yet requiring resonance,
and there you are

plucking the thread, watching the trails as I reverberate,
denying me feedback, taking without due donation,
condemning my voyeurism, confusing the hole I peek through
into your secret vault while the game goes on, unabated,

while upon the wall you continue to be
the ephemeral, invisible fly
buzzing by, right on through the infinitesimal spaces
between my slender, slick and hungry fingers,

just itching for another on this lonely wavelength,
soul breaking away for a piece of mind,
frustrated in futility at how irrevocably entranced I am,
unable to cast away this spell.

 

[ControlDenied]

its cool. if i may provide some criticism, even if it annoys you, you use too many long words. amplify the meaning itself more and don't worry if you sound like a 'real' poet or writer. i really like the themes of "Stone" and "resonance." actually it is fucking awesome. i wrote a song with a theme basically like that, it involves my voice resonating the word "stone" several times actually.

 

[Jabberwocky]

Controlled: we dont offer criticism unless asked for it is part of the rules of words. Ill let this one slide since i dont think the OP minded.


Good work rewiired, I can always tell your work because of the dark fluidity of the thought forms moving about. As usuall i enjoyed it.

condemning my voyeurism, confusing the hole I peek through
into your secret vault while the game goes on, unabated,

so many real and hinted at meanings. was great to read

 

[ControlDenied]

thats pretty odd man... bluelight has a lot of nazi style rules. you guys ought to take note of this and fix it at some point.

 

[IXinX]

what's a nazi style?


and i didnt notice any big words here really.

i'm going to go buy some chocolate now

 

[Mehm]

I like how many of your pieces start out with descriptions of the universe and world, then transcend into your own personal place in the static.

tops as usual