stand up alive.

[rewiiired]

Take the lessons learned,
winning through mastering
better play, then walk, let the
universe behind you burn away.

The past has no right
to intrude upon today, fight
the phatom hands holding you
back from living your own way.

You've been acting
as if you've been molded
by every hand but the ones
swinging limply at your side,

accepting this state
of mind, your life as fate, as
if you're stuck with how you
came off the assembly line.

It's time to wake up, stand up and die.

Everything changes, the
only permanence is impermenence,
everything dies and is reborn
every moment of every day,

all is transitory, life is fluid, and
instead of surfing the wave you just
gave into the undertow to
wallow and cast blame.

Take the lessons learned,
winning through mastering
better play, then walk, let the
universe behind you burn away.

Stand up and ride, push on inside,
get over from under and live on to
perpetually die, embrace will and
responsibility, live your life

awake and shed away the lies.
You're condemned to free will by fate:
it's time to wake up, stand up and die,
it's time to wake up, stand up alive.

 

[(Wordy)]

I admire this for its hopeful, leaf-turning message. It's well-constructed too.

I like this stanza, and the fact that you've repeated it:

Take the lessons learned,
winning through mastering
better play, then walk, let the
universe behind you burn away.

 

[yakksoho]

Unreal! I feel that the first 4 stanzas (and the single line) stand on their own; however the latter half adds to it and the rich contrast of them culminates in the final two lines. Very inspiring and observant. Excellent beyond words.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Thank you I really needed to hear this.

You've been acting
as if you've been molded
by every hand but the ones
swinging limply at your side,

I think this is possibly the most introspective and beautiful piece I have read of yours yet. Never ever stop writing!

 

[it was.]

i liked this. it gave me a nice picture in my head to look at.