Spinner

[psycosynthesis]

Once I dreamt
That I was lying under
a gossamer web
Silken, precise in beauty.
It radiated and entwined peace.

Above it fluttered a hummingbird,
radiating with delicate colour as
it weaved.

 

[Jabberwocky]

I really liked the succinct way you wrote this without sacrificing any kind of descriptive quality. The flow for me was slightly thrown off when the word radiating was repeated. In such a short poem to repeat a powerful word like radiate must have more meaning than i am deriving. Can you elaborate on why or what you were writing on?

 

[New]

It's quite beauteous. I would personally have trouble writing something so singular in nature.

 

[up all night]

This really is quite perfect.

 

[psycosynthesis]

This poem is about a dream I had, in which I was lying under a spiders web which was being woven by a hummingbird. I didn't actually realise I had repeated radiating/radiated, just wrote it and pressed post. I might consider changing it but I sort of like it.

 

[Jabberwocky]

It threw me off but it does not mean it should not be there. It gives a great image, everytime i read it im transported.

 

[sunflash876]

awe-inspiring.
simplyy amazing.

 

[Mehm]

great title, very nice piece