"Sour Oblivion"

[Jennyfur_Karma_Kin]

So... just a wee follow up to "Lead Us Not Into Damnation"... written 24 hours after it.

This whole mess
Was meant to be a weight off my chest
Now I'm smoking oblivion
Sinking and wasting
No obligation
but
Nothing could mean more to me than you do
You're powerful
You've got the brightest smile I know
But I see the darkness in you
It doesn't scare me

Eyes flash in the dark of the room
Connecting in a place I don't know how to get back to
Deep, so deep within me
Whispering to me in someone else's voice
The smell of you
Your warmth and your power
That kissed my soul
Through the heady midnight hour

Things are failing
We're being blown apart
You're only supposed to blow the bloody doors off
My friend

It's been 24 hours since I lost my head
I lost my edge and I was so angry with you
I've been wasted for a day
You'd be so disappointed
And I hate the fact that you're not here to tell me so
Your anger can do good things sometimes
Because you're the only person I listen to
Sometimes the only one who makes sense
Now I'm displaced
If you could only see the pain
On my face

How can something full of such promise and hope
That was born of a positive place
How can it just burn out like that
No more laughter, no more chat
Why the fuck can't you just talk to me
Or understand what I'm trying to tell you
This isn't something I can fix

You have to

You have to

You're the thief that stole my heart when I put it in a safe place
You're the stranger that I found that turned out to be my life

Who the fuck am I without you
But who the fuck are you right now
And what the fuck have we become
I can't deal with this
The taste of this sours me
Are you even thinking about things
Or drinking your way into living hell
You're too good for that shit
What the hell are you doing
Take just one second
Swallow my perspective
Live through my eyes and see the truth for once
Because I'm drifting away
Please don't let me get lost again
For who knows when the tide will turn
I'm scared
Sour oblivion

Wastes me

Fakes me

Loves me

Takes me.

 

[VSlazorlightning]

This is some really good verse but the end outshines it all,

I'm scared
Sour oblivion
Wastes me
Fakes me
Loves me
Takes me

Good work, keep it up.

 

[dhcdavid]

I too enjoyed this: raw and powerful stuff.

But, for me, suddenly hearing Michael Caine's voice in the middle of it really didn't add much. But hey, who cares what anyone else thinks eh?

Keep writing and using that anger to such dramatic effect.

 

[Jennyfur_Karma_Kin]

Thanks for your feedback, peeps. You're right about the Michael Caine bit... but that random moment in the middle of all the anger is pretty much par for the course for me and the person that this was written about! We both have stupid senses of humour as well as terrible tempers! Not that anyone else would know that but, hey, it works for me. Thanks again for reading.

 

[dhcdavid]

Lol. Now I understand and thankyou for not being cross at me - I had no right objecting to your including a Michael Caine quote..... it's just I've never been a fan of his but realise I'm in the minority and lots of people dig him.

 

[Jennyfur_Karma_Kin]

It's ok! You're totally entitled to your opinion and I loved your honesty!