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so cold as stone.

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rewiiired

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The world rushes around me
as the world rushes within me
hard to find some time and space to breath
difficult to find myself amdist the chaos and

as I step back, I say,
promise you won't fade away
as I force a knife into her heart,
and she says, okay.

She is so unconventional.
So mysterious, so damn beautiful,
but I can't complete myself through her,
I've got to reassemble myself.

Heavy thoughts call for isolation,
locked doors and meditation,
fresh eyes for my situation,
and this world demands
enough obligation.

How I wish I could be so much closer
and yet be so much more free,
two more desires that hardly
seem compatable with the
nature of reality.

She says I'm her one true north,
but I'm still out in left feild,
and holding my hand I know that
she felt me lagging behind.

And sometimes she feels like home,
but to do this I've got to be alone,
so she gives me the benefits of
her mind and heart and arms
and bed with out the traditional
titles or sacrifices.

Am I so cold as stone or is it
just a wall I'll eventually
break through?

Will I ever find myself and will
her and I be compatable
if I ever do?
 
I liked it a lot, for some reason, in the beginning i thought that it felt like the character was some kind of a cyborg or something with emotions conflicting with thoughts and protocols and such, but after the first third, it regained its humanity.. hmm, i'm just strange today.. I def. enjoyed reading this, great write!


skjalff
 
"You are co cold, put your hand in mine. Wise men wonder while strong men die."

Funny how true north is not the same as magnetic north.....
 
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As I was reading this
I put into play
the words in my head
that a certain someone
was tring to say.
These perfect words,
that he was trying to convey.

And through these words
as you say 'she' and 'her'
you (and he) put me
in this place,
where you described
so articulately true
where I stand.

And all these questions
that you raise
stay unanswered to you
as they do to he and I.
I was just to remain
the one that
gives me the benefits of
her mind and heart and arms
and bed with out the traditional
titles or sacrifices.
Click to expand...
until I cannot continue to wait
until he finds what's right in his mind
and I break that promise.
promise you won't fade away
Click to expand...


Thank you so much for this tonight.
It hit the fucking spot.
 
A true explanation for human nature. The push and pull of love lies in ur words, which are beautiful.

That wall is breakable, and if it is meant to be broken, it will be by ur true north.

Fantastic reading so early in the morning!

And exactly what iLoveYouWithaKnife said ;)

B
 
Let me explain how fucked up my head is right now. As I am reading this, I started to cry and was amazing at how beautiful and honest this was.
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Read down, and realized I already read this and responded. I do not remember it at all.

My head won't stop spinning and my stomach won't stop aching.

Once again, great piece and I hope we all find out true north.

~B
 
Yeah, I'll comment on this a second time also.

This was absolutley great.
I re-read this a few times, and it just hits the nail on the fucking head more and more each time.
 
i can relate to this poem somewhat i wish sometimes that people would be a bit more emotional like me ( or at least show there emotions when needed)
 
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