Shadowcloth

[yakksoho]

I.

The coloured lines
__converge to black
across her back,
yet maun disgrace
__the fingertips
__that kiss her face;
love-light's shadows
__interlaced.

II.

And my sweet shadow
__ comes to rest
against her breast,
her lips encrusted
__ to the tips
__ with dried tears of
lullabies, half-undressed.
The fresh death-mark
__ of Nero's kiss
__ (bright maroon);
And the moon (faithfully)
forgets to rise.

III.

She meets me
__ as the night progresses
around her tresses,
half-way through each
__ naked curl. The limpid sky
__ within her eyes
(which intersect
as she undresses) -
__ and forgets her
__ bodice laces
as she presses
her fingertips!
__ The moonlight's lips
__ kiss our faces
as the shadows
__ re-collect.

IV.

Should the moon
__ decline to climb
along her outstretched fingertips,
and linger there,
__ in pleasant places,
__ where the laces cross her spine;
(I'll unlace her bodice gently
and let her tears curl into mine.)
__ When she sits in her high places,
__ does the body re-align?
Do the shadows, recollected,
supernova & refract?
__ Does each finger then untrace
__ the predilected path assigned;
each coital act,
each sigh displaced;
__ each sin cast aside,
__ intact?
The coloured lines (that interlaced),
__ no longer shadows,
__ fade to black.

 

[cherub]

very shakspearing like. good job

 

[plazma]

To say that this is fantastically well worded and flows beautifully would do it an injustice.

It's without a doubt among the best pieces of poetry I've read, period.

If I could write something this good, I'd die content.

-plaz out-

 

[katmeow]

Simply stunning.

The imagery you use is truly evocative.

 

[yakksoho]

Thank you all, so much, it is perhaps to be considered my ode to Ezra Pound (or rather, _as_ him).

 

[(Wordy)]

This is very fine.

I can definitely appreciate the Pound influence. Sharp imagery, fluid rhyme, craftsman's structure.

I especially liked these:

"And my sweet shadow
__ comes to rest
against her breast,"

"Does each finger then untrace
__ the predilected path assigned;
each coital act,
each sigh displaced;
__ each sin cast aside,
__ intact?"

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

yakksoho I am so happy to see you posting here again, like cherub said very shalespear! Your choice of words is beautiful and the flow is like that cloth falling across her skin. Welcome welcome back. Please stay!

Everyone, I highly recommend that you dig back in the archives to find more from yakksoho, you will be moved!