romantic climate

[Baker]

romantic climate

How does it make you feel to inspire someone
To help envisage a fire within one
The spark that whips up and ignites the dynamite
Saying the right remarks that light up the dark sky tonight

The growth of creativity branching out ideas
nurturing the process like the sun promotes photosynthesis
Ready to mate, regenerate and create new life
Green vitality absorbing the rays of light

Help my thoughts flow like liquid into the soil
creating a balance that harmonises the soul
Like the currents of a river or the deep blue sea
My thoughts are pleasent, placid and free

I breathe in your essence to clean up this message
Fillling my lungs with your sweet air of presence
Northern winds dry the tears and blow away loose debris
Frees me like leaves to glide and guide the fires of passion

 

[Baker]

May as well post the poem that lead up to this one, Wrote this one a couple days ago, but wasn't as happy with it
but it looks like a good sequal now. lol

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Harmonizing Chaos

Images of you and I flying into the descending night sky
The energy from the sun flowing betwen us and kissing the dark
Warmth transferring and populating our souls
As we turn the ignition, the horizon unfolds

We drive into the sunset, time trapped into eternity
Like a photo, your image is burnt onto my memory
Quantum physics lets it divide into infinity
Like a breath of fresh air the energy enters into me

Perception of beauty is a simple concept
reception of harmony is universally subset
Yin flows into yang as darkness into light
as we create a new dimension full of might

Divulge in impurities and free your soul
As you expand into the void that you seek to unfold
I can't describe things metaphysically as that would be superficial
but our beauty extends beyond the external is me speaking truthfully

 

[doofqueen]

Wow! They are so beautiful!! So much love and passion in them. So beautiful! (yes i said it twice) So lovely!! :D

 

[ControlDenied]

I really like your poetry. It is genuine, well-written and idealistic, and speaks the right truths.

I also really like stylistic rhyming...

 

[colicolo]

^ agreed

 

[IXinX]

x2 in agreeance

 

[Baker]

Thanks people. It's amazing how few words like the ones you've posted above can affect my mood so much.

Definitely encouraging

 

[ControlDenied]

really? for me, masturbating in the mirror is the main way i get encouragement. Damn, that guy loves me.

 

[wastedwalrus]

Holy shit. Amazing. I read each of them three times. Very professional imagery and use of metaphors. I also commend you on taking a subject that can be very trite like love and making it... well... enthralling and unique.

The only criticism I have is that some of the rhymes in the first poem are a bit cliche and simple. I say this because I feel that you and your work deserve better. It's beautiful