Rhythm(less)

[Dakeva]

For a heartbeat we found our pace.
Then the record skipped has all been erased.
To thee heart you must be true.
At this moment I must be too
At a moment an imperfection arose.
I heed to this knowledge, I suppose.
Bitter in fact, more so in sense.
I wish I could say I did not regret
And the record skipped…and the record skipped
Before the skip a beautiful symphony.
Remember? The endless possibility.
Romance, Caring and all of the like.
Just for you, just because it all seemed so right.
We missed that beat, bitter and true.
Correct it, forget it, begin it anew?
You slipped off that pace as I did too.
Just know as the record skipped…
I was falling for you…I was falling for you

 

[brownman]

Great work! I have been that record many times. You are pretty cool for an asshole

Brownie

 

[EbowTheLetter]

A kinder, gentler Dave? Egad.
I am thoroughly impressed, man!

 

[bittersweet]

 

[bc]

Dakeva.
damn, i knew that underneath that asshole facade there was a smart, articulate softy hiding.
this poem really is excellent. props.
bc

 

[Angelight]

i thought this was fabulous

See you really are a mush

luv
ange

 

[Mellabopper]

awww looks like he does have a soft side. i like it, damnit! let your alter-ego out more! hee hee
but this was a great piece - i had no idea you could write as well as you do. this gave me the chills, as much as i hate to admit it, so you know its good.
post more of your work, damnit! that's an order!
Mellabopper
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animals are for petting!
"does anyone know where we are? because i think i dont have a clue"
"damn the man, save the empire!" - empire records
Corruption is key.

 

[CasperGyfu]

Keep on writing and never let anyone tell you, you are not good!!
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CasperThe ghost with the most!

 

[FunnyDust]

wow... i really like that... i didn't know you wrote like that. good to see another side

 

[PixieGirl]

aww people have seen the soft side of you that I know is there!! I hope your ok. I love ya sweetie!

 

[Bi KaNd*E* RaVeR]

aww!

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~*Princess Jen
Head of the Right Coast BLT Crew and Official Leg Humper of the SBS.
~DAYUM!!! -Spencer
Friends dont let friends get MULLETS!-Got it Jay? =oP
*Don't frown, 'cause you never know when someone is falling in love with your smile*

 

[L O V E L I F E]

Fantastic.

 

[Zennie]

well, i finally get to see some work of yours for never sending any to me, and for not writing me an email, damn you!
but on a more serious note, i always figured whenever i did see your work, it would be good. you've got soul in you and that's what makes a good writer.
muah.

 

[Lady D]

it's great to see this side of you

.

 

[femmme fatal]

wow, not only was that fabulous poetically, but it really touched me.
i'm thoroughly impressed
aj the femme
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the extra M is for MmmMmmmm
Be Good!!!

 

[RaveAngel]

Goddamn... that was seriously incredible. Very nice work!
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What difference do you think you can make? One single man in all this madness...?

 

[Salby]

Nice One

 

[Dagny]

I didn't know you when you were an asshole...we just met this weekend. But I like your writing, sweetie. Nice work.

 

[poezante]

so good, yet so sad..
::hugs::
miss ya

 

[Mr. Sticky]

Really good stuff, dak...on several levels.