Reminisce....

[GirlInterrupted]

Some days I lay down to look at my ceiling & try to remember the pains that scarred my soul and made me who I am today.
I wish I could capture the memories with words but words cannot capture to what I felt. It was an overwhelming feeling that I hope to never feel again, yet pray to never forget. As days go by I feel as though my memories are becoming less vivid. So I sometimes will sit down and try real hard to re-live the moment in my head and write what comes. Here's what I got:

I've seen you ruin so many beautiful lives
Yet I open the door & welcome you into mine
I'll give you you my money, my time, my life
Just reassure me that everything will be alright
You've got your own special way to charm
Cradle & caress me in your warm arm


Thanks for viewing. It means a lot.
I can't share this to everyone.

 

[GirlInterrupted]

So frustrated. I re-read it and it is crap.

 

[panic in paradise]

no way, not crap or close.


i especially like it because its effective, honestly. some people have more experience writing, but not at being able to convey or create an ambiance...
;-)

why not start over if you dont like it? it can be very valuable, in many ways.

 

[herbavore]

I've seen you ruin so many beautiful lives
Yet I open the door & welcome you into mine
I'll give you you my money, my time, my life
Just reassure me that everything will be alright
You've got your own special way to charm
Cradle & caress me in your warm arm

You capture the not wanting/wanting perfectly.