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harraser

harraser

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take a seat my love
its all on its way.
would you like a drop?
moisten those dry lips while you wait

i swear it wont be long.

knife in your left hand
slice the meat away
take your time now dear,
this is too good to waste.

how
did it ever come to this?

hush for a minute now
listen to the rain
dont you like how the candle flickers
in the breeze from the cracked pane.

its time to leave for home
maybe we'll meet again soon

i hope you dont forget me
 
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harraser said:

hush for a minute now
listen to the rain
dont you like how the candle flickers
in the breeze from the cracked pane.
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mmm...rain on a tin roof...the ultimate relaxing treatment...

i liked this hun. always love reading ur work. nice work *hugs*

kel
 
impressive

harraser said:

dont you like how the candle flickers
in the breeze from the cracked pane.
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wow - i love this line..
this is really good - i like the simplicity in your words.. very good
 
Nice work.. you created such an intense yet gentle atmosphere with these words..
 
ant as always it takes me time i read your poems searching for something , always forgetting your just a great poet in general, words that always make me think.


Missing you today!

love
cin
 
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You know this really does paint quite the picture. Even the way you have your stanzas positioned gives the feeling of some unseen presence giving little suggestions like they are anxiously waiting to see the product of there interloping. Slick babes real slick. I even like the use of the words "meat and meet".... It was creepy how the second "meet" made me think of how the first "meat" was so on point in terms of mental imagery!!!! I like.
 
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