Reflections

[Vaile*]

For this long, we've known and saw, that somewhere soon,
some time would come, when the sum of us would only go so far.
I was granted you and that granted grew,
while we walked the path we thought we knew,
And soon enough it came to pass,
an end grew near upon that path,
that we couldn't quite see, or wanted to,
we kept on going and passed on through..............

And it wasn't what I'd thought would make mother smile.
And we're still dragging our heart strings behind us
while we try to catch up to each other.
Somewhere along that path we began to pull away,
as we still travelled, side by side.
And upon my side it was you that I saw, as you smiled and held my hand.
And I arrived smiling at the end to see, that what I thought was you,
vanish in the wind.
I left your shattered body behind on that path long ago.
So blind was I that I did not notice.
I walked with only your shadow as I looked upon my own.

And here I am, finished and alone.

I have become
my own enemy.

 

[Taliana]

Aww honey. As much as i want to try and understand this piece, im a little bit lost. Is this the shadow of your self? The person you thought used to be you, that you have left behind?

Im normally pretty good at understanding and reading into pieces, but i cant really work this one out. Maybe im not meant to.

Hope you are doing well... *hugs*

 

[Vaile*]

*Return hugs*

"Somewhere along that path we began to pull away,
as we still travelled, side by side."

One of those great relationships that lasted for sometime.

"And upon my side it was you that I saw, as you smiled and held my hand. And I arrived smiling at the end to see, that what I thought was you, vanish in the wind."

Eventually, they come to an end. Sometimes you can look back though, and realise it had ended long before anything was said.

"I left your shattered body behind on that path long ago.
So blind was I that I did not notice.
I walked with only your shadow as I looked upon my own"

And all that you actually had, was what you had convinced yourself was there.

"And here I am, finished and alone."

The hardest part is realising that for all this time, it was your own fault.


This was written during one of those calm reflective moods. An exercise in becoming at peace with ones self I suppose.

Hope it makes a bit more sense *hugs*

 

[Cosmic Mist]

This is amongst the most brilliant and insightful pieces i have read in ages - i'm so please to have been able to share in it...

It seems that you are moving on, which is the only thing to do really. Introspection is so good for allowing such clarity as this, and more often than not it is these moments that truely makes or breaks a person.

I'm glad to see you have opted for the former option.

Stay cool within your own head space my friend.

*Hugs*

 

[katmeow]

And all that you actually had, was what you had convinced yourself was there.

I know that feeling all to well.

Beautiful work. Despite the words in which you close the piece, it really has a sense of acceptance and 'moving on' about it, especially the way you speak about it in your second post.

I liked this very much!

Take care

 

[Cure or Disease?]

wow.. i could feel the emotions of your words flowing into my body. great piece. =/

 

[Adikkal]

definitely, quality work Vaile*.

Nice piece

Adikkal

 

[Raz]

The first time I read this I liked it just for the imagery and the strange flow, but when I re-read it....*sigh*....kind of brings back sad memories.

These portions in particular really hit home...

And it wasn't what I'd thought would make mother smile.
And we're still dragging our heart strings behind us
while we try to catch up to each other.

Most of my family hated my ex, but when we broke up our mothers were both as upset as we were ourselves...and my ex and I were so busy trying to be friends and mature and all the rest of it that it was like we were just dragging each other through more pain...

And I arrived smiling at the end to see, that what I thought was you,
vanish in the wind.
I left your shattered body behind on that path long ago.
So blind was I that I did not notice.
I walked with only your shadow as I looked upon my own.

And here I am, finished and alone.

I have become
my own enemy.

I don't know if this was your intention...but this makes me think of how you begin to realise that the person you thought you loved so much was really more of an ideal than anything else. And eventually you realise that you've left that person behind a long time ago. And before you really deal with that, you hate yourself for it for a while first.

Great piece, this really made an impact.

--Raz--