Purpose

[(Wordy)]

(Carrying on the parenthetical theme...)


Purpose

I (can) try to tell you why
I’m (out) on the street
in the intense (flashing) inane
under a (scathing) weather
darting forked tongues (which)
can’t integrate (into) my mood
thinking do I (really) want to be
confined to a place (that) collects
itself (only) as suburbs of
(decorative) leaf-dream fallacy
thinking (do) I really want
to carve (out) and protect a space
to freefall into familiar cliches(?)

(But) the question then becomes
to leave everything (behind)
(i.e.) become ascetic wandering
among mysteries of (love and) chaos
or (go) backwards into the body
(to) drug and kidnap senses
disordered (until) they push
the size and speed of the (signal)
(towards) de-iced present
the present I have (to)
(show or pass) you in a word
but nobody can say exactly (where)
(can) guess exactly which


(c) Stu Hatton 2005

http://wordyness.blogspot.com/2005/06/purpose-2005.html

 

[cherub]

I like the theme you are going with here,,, great write,, the end got me alittle confused though

 

[(Wordy)]

When I wrote this (about 5 months ago) it was actually as part of a much longer piece, which remains unfinished. The parentheses were something of an experiment which I don't think completely came to fruition... they kind of evolved with the piece, rather than being pre-meditated. But once I decided to use them, I used them for every line of the piece, not just here and there, so they almost became a formal constraint. Hmmm... anyway...

I think the poem can be read as if the parentheses aren't there at all... they just add another layer of semantic possibility.

 

[Mary Poppins]

i loved the last one with parantheses, but in my opinion it was just a bit much in this piece? i tried reading without the parantheses words and it flowed really well without, the words fall together nicely