Proposal and reply...

[*Cosmic Mist*]

I have most recently been proposed by one of my friends that he and i should become something more. His proposition was in the form of a poem, so thus is my reply...
Please tell me what you think, i have three days to get it right...
My friend it seems that you’ve, a question, posed
And await a reply, what ever it be,
Well I am afraid that I must, it, depose
And make it clear for you to see…
I love the way we can converse
And with our band, sit and rehearse -
A conversation will bring me glee,
And you’ve noticed this most obviously,
But my friend, alas, for this can’t be,
You and I are just friends, this you must see!
I don’t want to hurt you, or leave you lame,
But I cannot keep playing this [*edit* ridiculous] mind-numbing game!
You need to know that for you I’ve respect,
And our friendship I hope to never neglect,
But you and I are worlds apart
And I would only end up breaking your heart
For I cannot give you the love that you seek,
Nor the contentment you long for -
And I know it seems bleak
As you read these words,
But it shouldn’t really be,
For I’ve nothing reversed!
We were, and are, friends and that will not change,
There is no need for our lives to rearrange –
We are still friends,
But friends and no more;
Please don’t ask to further explore
Possibilities with this intense frame of mind,
For I’m not who you want, is all you will find…
Please don’t be sad, upset, or confused,
Nor hurt or cut, crushed or bruised –
I know how it feels to be where you are,
When the world around you seems suddenly so dark,
But rest assured there is one for you,
Who will love you without such world-weary abuse.
I am sorry that it couldn’t be me,
But this too will pass, and soon you will see
That we are but minnows in a sea of life;
That love and injustice, in this world, are rife;
But if you continue to be who you are,
Without giving in to life’s pressures bizarre,
You will find that special girl
Who you will wrap up,
And become her world…
[ 22 October 2002: Message edited by: *Cosmic Mist* ]

 

[TiggerLuvsX]

But I cannot keep playing this ridiculous game!
I like it all except for this line. It just seems a little harsh! But overall, good work!

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

Is that better? I knew that line was pretty harsh - too intense for the situation at hand, but i couldnn't think of anything else at the time...

 

[plazma]

The romances change, the people change, the time changes, but the lies will always stay the same.
*end cynical rant*
Anyway, I like this work, its harsh, sure, but so is life, if you're not prepared to get used to it, then I have a nice 22 storey high window I'm prepared to offer anyone who'd like to take the plunge.
Nice work IMO.
-plaz out-

 

[TiggerLuvsX]

I think it's better...not as harsh. But do it in the way you think it should be done and according to how you feel.

 

[TiggerLuvsX]

this is off the subject, but how do you put smileys in the post??

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

^^^ no you were right... i don't want to hurt this guy because he really is sweet, just not the one for me - it would have been nasty to leave "ridiculous" there...
To put smileys in the posts, simply write them as you would in an email:
: + ) =
: + \ =
; + ) =
and so foth... there are heaps of them, so just experiment a bit... I think you will find more on this in the FAQ section...