porcelain fruit tree

[harraser]

Empty
Echos ringing clear
I'd love to talk
Youre not here

Listen to the wind
It's getting angry
I doubt you can tell
It's just me

I told myself
I wouldnt care
I told myself
That you were there

Eyes closed
I feel it all inside
Times gone
Wish i could say i'd tried

I told myself
I still cared
When i told myself
That you were there.

 

[plazma]

TIDY TIDY TIDY!
I really really like the emphasis on emptyness.
Such is life, and good work ant!
-plaz out-

 

[yoUr bLiSS]

Empty
Echos ringing clear
I'd love to talk
Youre not here
i loved this part...
i like how this was powerful thru it's simplicity...fancy elaborate words/imagery would never have gotten the point across as well....

 

[Angelight]

Eyes closed
I feel it all inside
Times gone
Wish i could say i'd tried
this is exactly how i felt tonight. Love you boy

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

I can relate! oh how i relate!
I think the best thing about this piece Ant, is that it's timeless. 200 years from now, people will still be able to read that and go "Shit, i can relate to that..."
*hugs*

 

[cherub]

Empty
Echos ringing clear
I'd love to talk
Youre not here
sometimes, your writting gets to me, something real and visual about it.

 

[Queen Beat]

So I read this forwards then backwards, then in seperate stanzas and got something different from it each time. Harraser, your words create such emotional imagery that they're always a pleasure to read. And *cosmic mist* is exactly right when she says this piece is timeless.
I miss you.

 

[E-girl]

this is kinda different from your usual writing style (that is, if you would say you have some defined writing style -- i just kinda notice one in my head usually)... but there is such a sadness to it... kinda like when you read it, the words just get carried away in the wind.
or maybe its just the mood i'm in, and the state of mind right now. at any rate, i'm lovin' it.