pink skies

[tweakin]

Imperfection in a perfect, perfect world

...with my daisies watered Daily,
and my reaction lacking Real friction, diction
and a picture of what is really honest and true...
My sentiments aching, Faking It and nearly
breaking
into the sensibility i know i should find ...
I'm hard as nails with the rising of the big
yellow yellow sun, and as it sets i grope
for another passage, a way out of here...
He brings back the memories
with grinding, biting, harsh music...
music to my Ears...
Soap queens with their bright eyes
and artificial hair - they dream of something plastic -
something pretty...
i dream of prancing in green fields
with my daisies watered daily...

 

[TiberCross]

continue to put your heart on page. it can only help.

these lines.....

I'm hard as nails with the rising of the big
yellow yellow sun, and as it sets i grope
for another passage, a way out of here

 

[belisimo]

really really nice rhythm, really really nice writing.
i like it alot, keep it up

 

[MisterPoetry]

I agree completely with the statements above.
You have wonderful writing ability.
Continue to apply it and I will continue to read it.
Thank you for sharing this!