Periphrasis of a Phallic

[RareForm]

The day is on fire.
Light bleeds into jubilation.
Comfort dwindles, misbegotten and miscellaneous.
Deception has the power to morph into a relation.
Frivolous fire-eyes force a flurry of fusion.
Time relents truth.
Reiteration of perception is a fluvial flow magnified,
and signified.
Lessons are lessened.
Intransigent to inure of ways less validated.
Pervading a pester of perspicacious pestilence.
Animosity invented to turn on mental absence.
Temperaments uttered to access malignant endeavors.
Rotate your encephalon to encipher graves dug.
Distract yourself and associate with this dissolution.

 

[Pantomime7]

Deception has the power to morph into a relation.
Frivilous fire-eyes force a flurry of fusion.
Time relents truth.
Reiteration of perception is a fluvial flow magnified,
and signified.


This is my favorite part. I love the way these words flow togehter giving life to this piece. Very, Very nice my friend.

 

[TiberCross]

great work%)

 

[3rd Realm]

I'm wowed by your fine tune sense of language.

 

[Altered_Soul9]

Simply amazing. Very Nice

 

[jaymie]

Animosity invented to turn on mental absence.

I loved this. Your use of language and understanding is astonishing to say the least. Great work!

 

[cherub]

this should be an adult lulaby, i loved it!!!!
when i read it in my head,, i relax. werid but cool !

 

[RareForm]

BUMP FOR ST

this is my latest poem, how do you wish to configure your assertion of me?

any real reasons?

 

[skjalff]

Amazing as always! You use many words I dont use very often at all and therefore don't really have any steady images and hooks associated with them, so while reading this it took my brain an extra moment to crank up new images for words while I was already reading the next line, I'm not sure how to describe this, but it definitely made the experience more ...for lack of a better word.. more-dimensional I also noticed that same thing happening reading some of your other pieces, the images and the rythm really work together. Great stuff


skjalff

edit: what I think was also cool - the poem is a set of set of statements (statement=line) that do not readily explain their relation to each other, but as i read this a few times, the lines were somehow (subconsciously?) linked in an order that was not necessarily top to bottom. Its very entertaining. Just a thought

 

[RareForm]

thanks...that really means alot to me...I need a little bit of inspiration during this period i'm going through...and then somebody from here, told me that i was a "fucking phony" which made me laugh at first because the guy doesn't know me at all...but then it sort of pissed me off, so i bumped this poem...anyway, thank you skjalff for believing in me..lol

 

[skjalff]

I didn't realize that some post was deleted so:

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this is my latest poem, how do you wish to configure your assertion of me?

any real reasons?
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didnt make any sense to me lol, I thought "any real reasons" stood for "more constructive evaluation", but i see now ) Rest assured, you are not a phony ) I'm sure 99.99% of people on this board would tell you the same. The guy is probably just jealous


skjalff