opium

[kitchkinet]

sweet smoke rising round my head
as the dragon takes to flight
am I living or am I dead?
as I enter astral night
warmth and love are all I feel
as my head begins to nod
all my wounds soon will heal
as I touch the face of god


I know it could use some revision but tell me what you think.

 

[on the road]

YES!! that's what I'm talking about!

 

[TrAnCe&aCiD]

I never done opium but your words make my mouth sizzle

 

[Lady Chaos]

I love it..Good work!

 

[kitchkinet]

:blush: thanks guys.

 

[Chalice]

Very fitting..

Very fitting to the perception and feeling I definately approve and applaud!

 

[Cosmic Mist]

increases my desire to smoke opium. and drink absinthe. and wear a corset...

at least i can do the latter of the three easily...

..somewhat...

 

[neverwas]

sweet smoke rising round my head
as the dragon takes to flight

i dont think it needs revision of any form...i really liked this. while i have never had opium and arent in a hurry to i really liked the way u have put the effects into words. this lines i quoted is greatly used and i really liked it. i thought u produced great visual imagery through this aswell as a desire to partake...for some anyways...

nice work.