On topic of government and what's good for you

[Whire Rabbit]

Second piece I've ever written. Welcome all comments, cheers.

I know in freestyling I'll never stop elevating
always working on my rhyming and the verbs I'm conjugating
it's like an endless journey from the moment I discovered
that in the beauty of this artform lies enormous power
freeflowing to me is a means of self expression
composing flows rapidly, inserting words in quick succession
my flows can describe anything I can envision
cos I choose rhymes with mathematical precision
I'm in the long process of becoming one with music
and I only progress forward, in battles never losing
but one thing that bugs me and makes me curious
when I'm on drugs my freestyling becomes furious
I'm dubious, as to how that can be
my head feels clouded yet I'm flowing freely
I smoke these green leaves and I suddenly turn
into a world's best mc without ever having learned
how to freestyle properly at that level
that's why some people tell me I sold my soul to the devil
for a bag of these buds and an instant gratification
of performing spoken art with an ease of conversation
all i heard from government until this day
is that pot will make me dumb and Es will make me gay
put down that skunk is all I got told
get drunk at the bar and pick up some girls
that's the kind of life we'd like to see you lead
get pissed, pick a fight and fall asleep
but in fact what I'm seeing in the reality
is that morality and legality are purely a formality
I'll never listen when get told to stay off drugs
by some dickhead with a bottle who can't walk cos he's too drunk
spent too much time dropping different combinations
my mind is way past open from psychadelic explorations
my enchanced mind state has now become permanent
though my reactions are a bit late from smoking so much herbal shit
but I'd rather be high and slow, than drunk and dumb
that's for the average joe who just wants to feel numb
through experiences I learned to see new perspectives
upon returning from my journeys I grab my pen and get reflective
I try to pick a new direction every time I write
accept nothing but perfection when I drop my rhymes
and if I could change one thing by going back in time
I'd change nothing, I got no regrets in my life
but it's time to leave and wrap up this piece
what did you all think? post your comments please

Peace

 

[.dR spgeddi]

you the man whire.
really strong lines, esp.
"what I'm seeing in the reality
is that morality and legality are purely a formality "

 

[Whire Rabbit]

Check, thanks doc! When are you going to post a piece again?

 

[.dR spgeddi]

ta, dunno.
i have nothing new underway, but also i feel a little disillusionned by the contributers lack of response when i do. it kinda pisses me orf, coz i spend so much time reading posts in this forum and really try to relate to/ and understand what people want to say.
but i will soldier on, and post something in the next few days.

 

[Whire Rabbit]

Yeah, I've noticed the same thing, not many people in this forum appreciate the beauty of precision rhyming, just a few of us really. Not sure why that is, maybe in order to appreciate this form of art you'd have to have attempted to write something of your own first?

 

[Adikkal]

Well, i'd already responded to this piece when u posted it at ozhiphop...

But, to reiterate, its dope. Nice rhythm indeed, good topic, good vocabulary. You got some skill man, nice ish!

Adikkal

 

[damon1872]

good vocab for shizzle. weed is lovely thing indeed. smoke sum trees, write a rhyme, its so addicting...but i got no prob with the liquor. i deffinately dont write as good on it. or speak as well. but i luv it. ~damon~

 

[Whire Rabbit]

Cool, thanks for your replies everybody! Yeah weed is great, I have much appreciation for that herb!
I got no problem with liquor either, just don't like being called a junkie by conformist rednecks that get blind drunk every weekend.

Peace %)