New Untitled Poem

[NovaShambles]

I'm so winded
From chasing after her-
My coma,
Elixir,
My one true love.
Remember how it feels to be young and invincible?
Is this what it feels like
To care more than i should?

Every time that I am alone,
I hear her call my name-
"Echo, echo,
Lost soul-
I am here to hold you..."
There has always been this,
There has always been here,
There has always been her
The perfect picture
Waiting in the wings.
Every time that I'm alone,
I want to draw her close,
And the second that she draws me in,
I am her's forever.

This isn't love-
This is losing my heart
The enormity of emotion,
And my skin turning grey.
This isn't anything like living-
This is dying in the moment.

I'm so winded
From my heartache,
From chasing after the wind.
She's taking the space in my head
Where I had hopes and dreams,
But I will always have this-
The picture perfect day.
I will always have the feeling
That I have been in love.

 

[MCMG]

This is pretty high above average, im impressed you actually know real styles on poetry. Did you ever take a class or anything? I like it, except my style is I like to make shit ryme, I guess I just like to make shit ryme when I picked up freestyling.

 

[NovaShambles]

i haven't taken any classes since high school. i actually wrote this about a year ago, but i never really showed it to anybody, and i wanted some feedback. do you have any ideas for a title? also, what kind of hip-hop are you into?