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updating this thread with new poetry
 
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9/5/07 (1:32)

Maybe we have reached
our destination.
No more fussing,
No more fighting.
Maybe the past masters-
Kerouac, Buddha, Ginsberg
fought the battle
and won?

Should we then be content
with our growing wastes and
fattening wallets?
Perhaps it is strife
and struggle which fuels the soul;
not money and fucking and...

Can we melt into the Earth,
like a snow cone in August
(fucking New York heat).
Is our struggle done?

What do you say?
 
9/6/07 (2:56)

Spout your bullshit
I am your receptacle.
blind acceptance is my policy,
paying forth my life
this paper is indispensable

more Knowledge to be had
with the Savages and Brutes
Sally D. and Peyote-
bring this vision to me...

The White plague spread
East to West.
this righteous crusade
fuck the rest!


Gods on our side
this is for the best.
 
i enjoy your style. that simple hiku post can be deceptively scant on words but rife with meaning. I think also that by referencing those great minds of expansion with your origonal hiku makes all the better the lesson of words spoken and words related according to understanding.

You have a beat style as well aged by time not blinded by the glare of the new but tempered more with the wisom of what abundence can bring.

You should check out some neo punk texts of the 80's even lyrically speaking they are where you are. Fuck the regime.
 
hey man, thanks for the lengthy feedback. I'll have to look into that neo-punk.
 
I enjoyed all of your poems, especially '9/5/07 (1:32)'. It's cool that you time-stamp them. Does the time represent the moment of inspiration, or the moment of 'completion'? I place completion in inverted commas because the struggle is never done (there's my answer). ;)

And I respect the fact that you call Kerouac, Buddha and Ginsberg master.
 
I just time stamp them when I finish. titles are OK for haiku because they can add something, but the poetry i've just begun to write doesn't need any further explanation.





edit: and with that, I come up with a title for a poem :p
 
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Time line of (an) America(n)

eighteen years we are their slaves,
ask no questions: don't misbehave.
never thought to ask them why
we sit in rows while others die?

columbus sailed the ocean blue,
only if we ever knew...
culture thick, ran through their veins
we ushered in their end of days.

America is brave and true!
spout your bullshit 'til you're blue
culture void because of you
fuck your laws and fuck you too.
 
10:28 9/17/07 //// Welcome my old Friend

You come to me with a sharp bite.
a crisp reminder of time before:
memories and acquaintances flash before me.

have I lost it or are you here to stay?
only One knows,
but not for sure-
how can one ever be sure?

a favorite time for some
others hold distain in their hearts-
ignorance of your powers they possess.

only this I know:
I long for your innocence.
 
mountain like Buddha

mountain strong and true

going nowhere we can see

forgive our blindness
 
Yankees 1.5 games back... /// 9/19/07 (10:04)

three and two count now

batter focuses intense

effort all for naught
 
9/24/07 (10:37am) ///
high-ku?

green to red

withering as usual

until rebirth again
 
9/24/07 (Sometime during Brit. Lit to 1780)

Standing at the front
like an authoritative zoo-keeper.
How and Why
do you expect me to change?

Still just a mammal
as you were
10 million years before...

Should we be in classrooms,
cars and business suits?
Or exploring the world,
and spreading our roots.

Animal purity and
naturalistic brutality.
instead of this bullshit,
CAPITALISTIC mutiny.

Filling our heads
with deceit and dread
I'll tell you this now:
we'd rather be dead.
 
doofqueen said:
I really like the beat and tempo in your work.
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thanks for the comment.

I didn't mean to force you to read (my poems) because of that other thread :p
 
you didnt lol I comment on lot's of poetry... i'm just not very good at critiquing and just knowing what to say ... wish i was better at it ... i like what i like but a lot of the time i have trouble desribing why if that makes sense?
 
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