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my girlfriend wrote me a love poem, "My Display"

wesmdow

wesmdow

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my girlfriend and i have been going through a rough patch, and tonight she read me this poem that she wrote for me. it really touched me and i want to share it.
My Display
like vodka in the stomach
the ill words i speak make you churn.
with each empty sigh
and smug roll of the eye
i watch it burn.

there are roaches in my throat
as i stumble to be sincere
DAMN IT! im stabbing you again
until ive torn too much to mend
nothing ever right comes out of here.

ive used my "sorry's" more than tissues
ive blown, and blown, and blown it.
it doesnt matter if i mean them, which i do,
however the big hole, i never get through.
is it too late to to forgive, if i know you wont forget?

i feel curdled... i stir the spoon
the milk sour but the cereal so sweet
we're in this bowl together... fair.
and i AM willing to do my share
to stop swimming in sour with my feet.

forgive me. ive been cutting off my fingers.
its harder to reach you but please hold my hand
the grip might be loose-- as also your faith
but my love is no mistake.
it will not erase like bugs in the sand.

so will you walk with me now
across the disappearing sands
the whithered stones
listen to changing wind as it moans
and embrace our love, how strong it stands.

id like to feel ripe
to be new to you again but youre so far in
we're in... in love, in one another
parts of you are found in me, like a child and mother.
i dont know where to end.

but lets be simple now, we're at dinner now
ive waited all day
to see those eyes across from i,
to share a laugh, even if dry.
and put my deepest sincerity on display.

Pierre J***** D****
i love you
and if these words have lost merit,
then ill cut up this heart and we can share it--
because i dont want to be in love, without you too.
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she cried when she read it, and i teared up too. she really does love me:)
 
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Wow, that's powerful stuff. There's no doubt I would've lost it if someone wrote it for me. :)
 
i didint quite lose it, but the utter sincerity of it really DID get to me.

im still in love :)

but lets be simple now, we're at dinner now
ive waited all day
to see those eyes across from i,
to share a laugh, even if dry.
and put my deepest sincerity on display.
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these lines in particular stand out, because they depict our relationship so well.... she cant say what she means (one of the reasons we fight) but shes a SHARP girl--obviously--and can certainly put it on paper!
 
i think its really funny how she WROTE ALL that stuff down, and then weeks (kid you not) all those "legitimate" feelings shes soooo good at faking.(obviously because that letter touched MY heart and KNOW the bitch).

this might be a good philo discussion im thinkin... i mean unless shes a BADASS lyer (and dated herfor2 years... shewasnt) i find it curious on a psychological level how one can switch emotions SO fast...

wordy is this spirituality/religion fodder?
 
wesmdow said:
i think its really funny how she WROTE ALL that stuff down, and then weeks (kid you not) all those "legitimate" feelings shes soooo good at faking.(obviously because that letter touched MY heart and KNOW the bitch).

this might be a good philo discussion im thinkin... i mean unless shes a BADASS lyer (and dated herfor2 years... shewasnt) i find it curious on a psychological level how one can switch emotions SO fast...

wordy is this spirituality/religion fodder?
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I'm happy with any kind of discussion developing out of people's writing. I wouldn't look to shunt this kind of discussion to another forum, if that's what you're asking.

You seem pretty bitter. I'd be careful what you say about someone on a public forum if there's any chance they might read it.
 
were actually on pretty good terms.

i just couldnt get over the irony of the "love" poem she wrote me, weeks before she left me!

what dose that say about her? about me? (thats why i thought another forum might be appropriate)
 
It stabs...and she left WEEKS after that? That's cruel.

Ah, well, all it shows is that emotions are ever-shifting.
 
I have to agree with wordy on this one, that posting previous love-letters, written from a girl's ravaged conscience, and then bashing her for it even though she obviously had an intense attachment to you wesmdow, is not admirable. The poem is beautiful, and devastatingly sad as well.
like vodka in the stomach
the ill words i speak make you churn.
with each empty sigh
and smug roll of the eye
i watch it burn.
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It appears there might have been communication problems between you two. I get the feeling that you fueled each other's fire, and ended up apologizing a lot. Also seems like she never could get through to you...
ive used my "sorry's" more than tissues
ive blown, and blown, and blown it.
it doesnt matter if i mean them, which i do,
however the big hole, i never get through.
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And was the relationship steady to begin with..? seems like things were becoming sour between you two, and rendered her with loads of guilt, but she was intent on hanging on.
i feel curdled... i stir the spoon
the milk sour but the cereal so sweet
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So before bashing this girl, read the poem a little more, and interpret her subtle pleas, and the monstrous guilt presented, for she was obviously struggling with getting through to you, to write such a poem... and i dont believe she ever did...
 
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truly, we did not see eye to eye.

we are on good terms now and have discussed it: we do not agree on some deep-rooted philosophical issues, which is why she could never get through to me.

usually it had to do with what she called "being in tune with nature/gaya" and what i called, "hippy bullshit"

im a cynic. sue me. it lost me a relationship. honestly tho, i feel as tho her words here are hollow. she WRITES that she put effort into the relationship, lol! (reality is a different matter!)

o and yes, i am bitter about it all. ive never felt so violated in my life as when she left me, mostly because she refused any personal responsibility for any problems we (or she) ever had. it was always someone elses fault, she was the victim.

poor her.
 
well you can't solve opposite philosophical views, sorry things went sour man... liked the conversation this old piece sparked up. drama drama drama - you'll find a better girl im sure, someone who you 'see eye to eye' with.
 
like i said, were on good terms now. we talked out our differences after shit cooled down... analyzed the problem and were casual friends now. :)

back on topic: i think its odd how someones emotions could change so quickly, or as amanita said.. maybe there was foreshadowing of the split to come?
 
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I think that she'd been struggling in her mind for a while... the poem sounds so tinged and bitter to be just an ordinary fight. I don't think that a basic misunderstanding led to such a poem. Most likely, her emotions didn't change suddenly as it appears to have unfolded, but was something that had maybe been picking at her for a while. it's peculiar you two are friends, based on the bitter feelings you still carry. how does that work if she brings negativity into your brain? take care of you, and try not to argue with each other any more even if it is casual... ex-lovers tend to do that around one another.
 
we stay pretty distant...

one of my issues with her is that she wouldnt come out and say something i did would bother her. shed bottle itup.

then let it out months later, pissed as hell, like id been doing it on purpose.

she "avoided confrontation" and so wouldnt ever tell me if i was bothering her.
 
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