"Missing You"

[dogbutt2112]

I am new here, this is one of my poems. I've been writing for about 4 months, and love it.

I am inspired by my girlfriend, Gwen, a brilliant light in my life, and half my age. It is rather personal, I hope you enjoy.

"Missing You"

Every day you are gone
I die a hundred times more.
My brain starts to unwind
I think of you yet again,
and am again reborn.
I feel we are one,
still my soul is still torn
without you here.
The pain comes and goes,
yet you are always on my mind.

My Dear,
I want only you with me
the rest of my days,
and can't wait
for you to be back near.
I need you with me,
in so many ways.

Tears of joy
Tears of pain
Tears of longing.
Most tears are uncried
Yet still remain
Drowning my heart,
A paper flower in the rain.
My tears are real,
And always leave behind
A feeling of belonging
With you,
despite the mixed
pleasure and pain.

You fill me up
with your smile.
Your special glory unfolds,
and I am okay for a while.
My feelings of longing
often untold.

I miss you even now
with you here,
knowing you will soon leave.
Lipstick on my face,
on my shirt sleeves.
Memories of your tender heart,
your love and your grace.
I can't stand it when we part,
With you,
my only right place.

I hurt, yet shine
I come unglued
with the thought of
losing you.
I hunger and pine.
Yes, you are coming back,
I still miss you
my divine, my Gwen
I miss you.

 

[neverwas]

aww...

welcome to bluelight hun...i liked this peice. im very fond of reading work that involves emotions and can easily be related to. it is ever so hard being away from those we love. trust me in this one. but as long as you have friends around you and the love between the two of you nothing and no one can get in the way or go wrong. i enjoyed reading this.

nice work. starfalls.

 

[cherub]

I very much enjoyed reading this made me cry cause i miss my bestfriend so much, life has become so hectic,,,, not even on line at the same time or that long enough to catch eachother,
your words are very touching,,, ,,,,, welcome to bluelight,,, and welcome to words,,my favorite place of bluelight!

I like your style of writting

 

[dogbutt2112]

Thank you

Thank you so much for your feedback. I appreciate the kind words, and would like more feedback, good or bad.

I have been reading a lot of T.S. Eliot lately, and can't help but feel inadequate next to him.

Gwen and I are very close, and I get her feedback, but up until now, she is the only one I have shared anything with, and she is not exactly an impartial reviewer.

I will be posting more for review as well.

Thank you

Jeff