Merging schizotype

[swilow]

Worn out and spiteful-
Wishing for difference-
Won't accept weakness-
Will never be ready-
Always behind you-
Falling behind you-
Worn out from hiding
Tired out from trying.

Walking in golden
Deleting the footprints
Pointing eyes starward
Unseating the rider
Two is two ones-
Black is dark white-
The moon is the sun and
The day is the night.

 

[protovack]

wow...really good

 

[empty_remains]

I been reading this over and over agin for about ten mins, it's amazing.

 

[Mehm]

very powerful with just enough ambiguity/mystery to provoke the intangible.

I especially like this

Two is two ones-
Black is dark white-
The moon is the sun and
The day is the night.

 

[swilow]

^Intriguing; I actually didn't like that bit- it felt too nursery rhymish.

Its actually a portion of a MUCH longer poem that I constructed when I felt SO SAD, and then reversed the feeling by combing sadness and happiness....hence the walking in golden and moonlight is sunlight etc..

Thanks for your comments

 

[lostNfound]

yin & yang, black & white. so many polar opposites that you could have put in there.
Mehm said it, just enough mystery.
Great stuff