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"Land ahoy!", you screamed,
In your worst pirate imitation
And suddenly the dark sapphire
Water became jade.
It was rather odd,
I thought,
That we hadn't
Met again prior to this day.

Back then, you left school
Rather hastily
And spent your seasons
At university
Studying Egyptology,
While I,
Recently divorced,
Moved about, place to place
Engaging in a string of
Unhealthy relationships
With horrible bitter women.

During all of this, I
Somehow managed to obtain
Work at a local public library,
Arranging and recommending
Books for people,
Slowly accumulating
Some scrap of income
And occupational pride.

I remember one bitterly cold evening
On your inner-city balcony,
Wrestling with the wind
To light a cigarette,
You had just returned from Dubai
Selling watches to the
Extremely affluent.
You crossed so much land and ocean
In those days, a real modern
Business-explorer,
And it suddenly dawned on me
That my youthful existence
Was being wasted sitting,
Compressed between bookshelves
Choking on dust and silence.

I tried thinking back
To our early life,
Trying to find where
That fork in the
Educational road
Left us on very
Different journeys
In society,
And how far we had come,
And strayed,
From what we had planned.

We sat now,
At a rickety table
With two stale cups of coffee
And a basket of croissants
Within the walls of a
Dilapidated mint-coloured
Apartment block,
A local cafe.
The sun was still
Half-way to noon.
You pointed to
Your mansion sitting
Atop a pale-pink cliff-face;
It looked like a
Wonderful, large bedsheet,
From across the bay,
Stretching over an
Emerald-coloured jungle.

I somehow
Always knew,
Though,
That beneath
The external decoration
Of ourselves,
That we were always
The same people,
The same kids back
Breaking open
Shops and stealing cigarettes.
Only now,
Our desires even
Larger and more extravagant,
With much tougher penalties.
Just two kids, playing adult dress-up
In this earthly playground.
 
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Glorieux vers libres!

This is perhaps the style hardest for me to succeed at and so encountering good specimens such as this are a particular treat.
The life of any human is tragic and beautiful, distinct from any other yet strangely familiar to us all. This flowing epithet induced a strange affect in me and i struggled to bind it with words. Not disquiet or comfort, not contempt, not compassion, neither sorrow nor joy, and solace wouldn't quite fit. Really it was almost like companionship.
Like "Ahah!, i knew i wasn't the only one!"

What i like best is the specificality and explicit detail of your description.
Things like
...Dilapidated mint-coloured
Apartment block...

and

Your mansion sitting
Atop a pale-pink cliff-face;
It looked like a
Wonderful, large bedsheet,

are so damned memorable that, even if you'd never seen quite the same, you might be persuaded your imagination is a memory

Far and away my favorite bit was
That my youthful existence
Was being wasted sitting,
Compressed between bookshelves
Choking on dust and silence.

The third line makes me picture him just another unread book, lonely and without purpose
meanwhile "Choking on dust and silence" is a vivid and original paradox that's masterfully bitter.
People only ever seem to hear silence, i've never heard anyone say they'd choked on it. Yet the discomfort seems more then just fantasy.

And how far we had come,
And strayed,
From what we had planned.
Everyone experiences this frustration at some point or another.
Things never quite go as we plan eh? Things change, things fall apart. We live in a whimsical reality.
We'll probably never win this battle much as we wish we could.

Just two kids, playing adult dress-up
In this earthly playground.
Aren't we all just wide eyed children pretending we know what and how and why?
Why do people insist on living in a framed world? Rules are flexible and possible encompasses more then any expect.
Though i think i may have grown rather fond of our playground.
A life trancends definition and description. Yet here you've trapped a whole existence in something as basic as words.

Well done, hope to see more!
 
Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts/emotions. I'm currently writing a short story for a competition but when I'm finished I'll be writing more of this type of stuff =)

Peace!
 
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