Manipulations

[RareForm]

Pretty soon it was my turn to speak
and i held up my hands,
waved my little white flag
in surrender.

He sauntered past the truth
and made it look miniscule
and improper
while i stood at the platform
waiting for a sign to appear.

Sarcastically i am not angry,
while every slight slip of the tongue
is a revelation to the observer;
i see more
than you give me credit for.

 

[neverwas]

i see more
than you give me credit for.

its amazing how people under estimate some people, and its often not till they are proven wrong that they understand how incorrectly they mis-judged em.

 

[BrightEyesIsMe]

je likes ...tres bon...tell ya in class what that means if you don't understand. good poem. J.L.

 

[Altered_Soul9]

This poem is a very nice use of words. Your style insanely above pare. very Nice

 

[TiberCross]

i'm humored by the jovial manner with which you dispense this particular prose. very non-chalantly. very confidently.

 

[up all night]

The first time I read through this I thought 'Damn, I wish it was longer.' But after reading it through the second time I realise it's exactly the right size.

I agree with TiberCross: I love how it's written in such a detached manner despite the fact the muse would be a somewhat infuriating person.

 

[neverwas]

Pretty soon it was my turn to speak
and i held up my hands,
waved my little white flag
in surrender.

ive read ur work four times now and always find something new to quote

 

[RareForm]

^lol...thanks

 

[.dR spgeddi]

 

[E-girl]

i like writings like this -- that give you a nice glimpse of someone's mind, but leave enough up to your own imagination.

 

[cherub]

sorry didn't get a chance to respond yet ,,,,,, read through this before but didn't get a chance to say what i had to say

I very much can relate to this on the level of people understanding others and what we look over people on a everyday basis,,, great stuff

 

[MynameisnotDeja]

There is so much emotion in your writing. I love it!

 

[drEaMtiMe*@#]

This is great! And i like that its short because truth itself is always so clear and simple -powerful- because of its simplicity. much like this piece.

i particularly like the part below. such a great observation of something that happens much to often.

Originally posted by RareForm
He sauntered past the truth
and made it look miniscule
and improper