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Lucifer's Labyrinthine Line

RareForm

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What dark demons ride with such wild derision?
First class berth with cancerous sparked cinders,
Sin heaped, coal fired and sorrow cooled.
A one-way ticket bought with sordid soiled soul
For crude clanking passage on dissolute dreams
With wicked welded cow-catcher of dank despair.

These narrow gauge tracks span crackled light years;
O'er monstrous mountains and green bile-choked sea.
Climbing meandering mile high elation elevations
Dropping into deep hollows of yellow brimstone stench.
Across thunderous trestles of troubled tributaries
And rocket, rolling through burning deserts of desire.

An enigmatic gray iron engine of electrical impulse,
Pulling coal tender of blackened past-pressed sin.
Graffiti-clad box cars crammed with rusty wreckage,
Mementos of some lost machine from Before Time.
Concluded by red caboose of malingering memories.
All jerking in swaying rhythm on riveted white-hot rails.

And this is the rackety train of pants-pissed half-heroes,
Dressed in harlequin armor with shattered swords.
Armageddon bound with Wagner sound surround,
Rolling raging into Stygian night on straining steam.
Shovel in the shriveled sin and grip the throttle tight;
We're riding red-eyed remorse on Lucifer's Labyrinthine Line.
 
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Wow. The way your words flow, no matter how complex, amazes me. Your words inspire me and make me want to write. Very Nice
 
^thanks, means alot.

The hopelessness of riding Lucifer's train on an unescapable track into hell... The graffiti on the box cars spells out our sins for all to read.
 
why can i stand in the middle of this poem and see the things around me and in my head and relate. Outstanding use of words that create an image i know so well.

:)
 
RareForm said:
And this is the rackety train of pants-pissed half-heroes,
Dressed in harlequin armor with shattered swords.
Armageddon bound with Wagner sound surround,
Rolling raging into Stygian night on straining steam.
Shovel in the shriveled sin and grip the throttle tight;
We're riding red-eyed remorse on Lucifer's Labyrinthine Line.

Amazing work! :)
 
Damn, man!!!


Awesome through out. And the last paragraph just caps it off. Great.

This is insane, how do you put this stuff together?? This is definitely a gift!



skjalff
 
cherub said:
why can i stand in the middle of this poem and see the things around me and in my head and relate. Outstanding use of words that create an image i know so well.

:)

most people should be able to do that same thing..

thanks for the replies everyone.. love you all.

:D

~Drew
 
damn babe you are so talented. i love this poem.. lol although ill admit it took me a few times to read it to fully understand it but i love it. great job
 
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