looking for a macabre

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

Misanthropy wormwood chewing tendon and fat inside
Neverland bereft of me, imploding vacuum
Just suck and suck inhale the world away..
Too all the things that never were…to all the things that could’ve been
To the cure - pesticide I could never find
Just out lash, hide, or jump in line
Digging ditches, getting blisters, looking for something to sate
In oxymoron personality traits
Afterbirth was never a good enough repellent
You’re all greedy flies, judges of judges
Sorry I give of the pungent aroma of shit
Can’t wash this face, can’t bleach these wings
Ghastly gashes that will never seal
Termite erosion that cannot heal..
no sonnet, limerick, ode, or song
can't tuck in and shh all that's wrong
Now I’m just searching for a macabre
Mothball deathbead, crust in my eyes..I sit in a silenced fate
[ 17 October 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]
[ 17 October 2002: Message edited by: BLULITER LackofMorality ]

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

Very interesting choice of imagery, a very different and powerful way of expressing what seems to be an intense sort of anger.
Vulgarity can be good, but remember not to over do it - having said that, this is a nice bit of venting.
Just don't forget to smile from time to time, there's no point in taking life too seriously, because you'll never get out alive.

 

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

most of my poems do have a rather pessimist persona painted before you... most of the positive things i write are just.. i dunno too sappy and childish.. so i kinda keep those to myself... i don't really think i can display what talent i have acquired into the things i feel good about, my poetry is also a venting for an overabundance of emotion in me.. and i rarely find it necessary to "vent" any postive feeling.. i like that inside of me long as possible and to savor every aspect of it.

 

[*Cosmic Mist*]

^^^
NO, i agree completely with that... if you ever read the pieces i post up here, you may notice that they all have a common thread in them. I too find it really dificult to write anything convincingly sincere that is happy - most of the time the imagery is off, or it some how is twisted into something obscure and quite abstract...
But yay for your stuff... keep posting.

 

[BLULITER LackofMorality]

my deal is..if u can write an optimistic poem without being corny/in love type shit..and still display a talent comparable to your other works.. (at least for me anyways) then you've hit that next plateau as a poet.. but that's just me..
normally people start out writing poems..either A: b/c of a love interest or B: because of heartache in one way shape or form,
Normally heartache is easier--at least i think.. it takes a deeper reasoning and self awareness to truly want to express happiness in a poem...other than romantic love