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Shucklak

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look around you

look at it all

all the kingdoms won and lost

all the lives and lights of the world

all the stories being written, all that have been written and recorded in the earth and stone

footprints left as the soul steps and walks on

i bear witness to it all and i am a product of it all and it paints itself upon me with wild and vivid strokes of all colors

my heart and mind and my body are wrought upon it in glorious synergy

your pain is my pain

it always was

your love and my love are not seperate

it never could be so

i float through the open windows of the universe and time stops

it never started

i open my eyes only to realize they were never closed

and i exist, as always, timeless

i have burned in the ovens of aushcwitz

i have served in the grand armies of caesar augustus

i have contemplated with buddha, we drank hot tea under the tree of knowlege

when lindy landed in france, i was in the back seat, and i cheered for him in the crowd

i caught the prophets blood in a cup at the crucifixition

i heard the snap of the keys as hemingway wrote his masterful prose and i sat beside whitman when he wrote his immortal poems

i flow through your wires and hop from electron to electron

tune your radio to any frequency and pluck me from the airwaves

i sing along to the music and i sleep in the hiss of white noise

walk on the shores and lift a shell to your ear and hear the awesome symphony of anima

you will hear me
and you will hear yourself
and you will hear us all

there is no alpha nor omega
there are no cherebums, no imps
there is no heaven or hell, no night or day

there is no death

and there never was
 
i dont like begging for responses, but im trying to kind of work on my writing, so i would appreciate if i could get some honest criticism. if you like it, great. if you dont, please tell me why. maybe give me some advice, maybe some lines could go, or theres a certain section that needs to be expanded, or the flow isnt right, etc......

if it sucks, tell me it sucks and why.......that is, if you feel like it.

hey thanks........
 
come into chat or pm me for a critique, i'd rather discuss this piece with you than write up what i don't like about it.
 
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