listen

[vurtomatic]

listen: blood drips
a drop a plop
an echo a voice
a scream hanging
crystal silver white
on black so bright
it hurts it pierces
my heart a beam of light
speared i hang crucified
my voice an echo
a plop a drop
drips blood: listen

 

[mealltach]

:D !!!!!!!
full circle. absolutely delicious. you just gave me a great idea re: an alteration of one of my own poems.
(don't worry, no plagiarism will ensue. )

 

[mealltach]

d'you know what the name of that poem-game is where you take a certain number of words, and try to write a variety of different poems solely by switching words around to create different meanings?
i forget what's it's called, it actually has a name. regardless, you reminded me of that.
sorry, i have this habit of posting replies, then reading the poem again, and wanting to write more.

 

[vurtomatic]

Originally posted by mealltach:
d'you know what the name of that poem-game is where you take a certain number of words, and try to write a variety of different poems solely by switching words around to create different meanings?
i forget what's it's called, it actually has a name. regardless, you reminded me of that.

no, sorry, i dont think i've come across that game though i'd be interested to find out too.
[ 07 February 2003: Message edited by: vurtomatic ]

 

[smileyfish]

Wow. I think Mealltach said it for me. Flawless circular imagery.

 

[ice-9]

i don't know how i managed to miss any of your works before.
excellent word usage and flow! I look forward to reading more of yours.

 

[praetorian]

Nice work vutomatic Short and sweet, just how i like them.