Kid a (adik)

[Tijo]

Kid a
Take the time, bury your thoughts, throw out the shovel.
I'd like to be back, for now I'll just hide
confusions a bitch, addictions my pride.
Float through the smoke, live always a youth
the moon is my love, she embraces my truth.
Live in the sky, but clouds turn to rain
down to the street, drip through the drain.
Try to chase the thoughts that race
it seems a waste they get erased.
The mind is my world, my life is the tide
glide on the crest of the waves that collide
onto the beach, I stretch and I reach
to get out of this pool of regret and deceit.
But I'm pulled back to sea where I drown in my sorrow
Just one more hit....and then I'll quit tomorrow
~Christopher

 

[Noodle]

Hrmmm.

 

[Tijo]

Nothin' like good, elaborate feedback
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[Nietzche]

Excellent piece! Wonderful use of metaphors (the moon and the sea) and an eloquent description of addiction. I was terribly impressed by this poem!

 

[Noodle]

Elaboration or adulation: You may take your pick.
This is a good piece that needs no commentary--in my book--except maybe my first gut reaction:
Hrmmm.
I'd give this one an A.
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[This message has been edited by Noodle (edited 13 November 2001).]

 

[apollo]

i'm with nietzche - great use of metaphors.
love the ending too...
not much i can say past 'well done'!
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