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Ketamine is...

Rated E

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Illuminating greys and silvers

Blissful detachment

Angles with meaning, distorted by the spaces in memory

Insight in tunnel vision

Puzzles pieces of knowledge scattered by this feeble memory

Waves of realisation, toppled by winds of confusion

Faded wonder

Dizzy, lonely joy

Inside this sour tasting powder.
 
I think this piece could be developed further. These sensations can be empowered with some emotion and more despcriptions or comparative analogies. To me this is the start of a brillant piece.
 
col i can see your point but if taken with the idea or perception of what Ketamine is i can see the illuminated glory of the words. To me having done or doing ketamine would expand this into a more flowery poem but ketamine itself is boiled down and segmented so meaning is simple yet subtle. one word has feeling and meaning that can last an eternity branching out to vistas unexplored. good work man.
 
Thanks for the feedback :)

At first I just wrote out phrases which I felt described the experience for me.

Then I tried to go for a sort of irony. I tried to get a contrast in each line, because that's how the experience can feel.

ie. "Illuminating greys and silvers."

Grey is something I wouldn't associate with illumination normally, but under the influence of Ketamine, everything can seem to have a silvery, greyish tinge to it.

"Insight in tunnel vision"

Insight, but restricted. I've also had the feeling of traveling through tunnels on it before, so it seemd kind of fitting...

I figured out a meaning to life, then forgot it upon sobering. But I still know what it feels like to know...
 
Rated E said:
I figured out a meaning to life, then forgot it upon sobering. But I still know what it feels like to know...

That is so true. I think this describes pretty exactly how I felt when I sobered up from a big line of K this past weekend. I couldn't quite put it into words at the time, but I had an absolute certainty everything would be just fine, that persisted long into sobriety. And it sure beats a 2 day e comedown!

Very touching poem. I'd also like to see it fleshed out a bit more.
 
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