Just wrote this

[rollinboyo]

Dunno what this shit is or where it came from, popped into my head. Criticize.

1.
For fourteen days I strode the streets
flitting, flying, from my fate

Escape, escape
I heard the word
circle cycle 'cross my mind

Alas, aghast, I looked ahead
and there before me stood my dread

a tall man
sinister
wicked
with eyes of smoke

he whispered softly
with menace veiled
“halt your flight
accept thy fate
or fear shall haunt thy every step”

“nay!” I cried
pitifully I moaned:
“my future is mine, and mine alone!”

2.
rocks under feet
clouds up ahead
the green country long gone.

a drop of rain
pleasant mist becomes a downpour.
I slip in the mud I slide on the shale.
a shrieking crow breaks the silence.

a child holds my hand.
he cannot smile
he will not laugh.
his eyes see far ahead
but his feet find no path.

we wander together but we are both alone.

3 (some political bullshit).
Quickly, quickly
sound the bell
Quickly, quickly
pound the drum

Arise, arise
step out the door
Arise, arise
prepare for war

boldly enter
where fear forbade us once to go
where tradition locked the iron gate
where rich men cower
trembling in their gilded tower

tear down the walls
tear down the walls
corruption now again shall fall

enough of lies
enough of hate
we must unite against the state

 

[mdmantpa]

I liked number 1 a lot, number 3 was good, and I didnt like number 2 as much...i think it could've been do to me reading it a certain way in my head and it not flowing right, but like I said it might have just gotten jumbled up in my head


very nice though, I always like to see people writing in here. keep it coming if you get some more good ones!!

 

[rollinboyo]

Thanks for reading, I'll post again next time I write something.