Just words.

[Pomplemous]

Would it have mattered if I'd told you
About how I love you?
Would it have changed anything
If I'd said I could see
The two of us together for ever
With seventeeen children
Or, ok, two or three?

If I'd not said that time
Would you still be around here?
If I'd strictly towed the line
Would you still smile at me?
If I'd not smacked your mother
If I'd not snogged your brother
if I'd not sold our porn film to BBC3
Would you be here with me?

Would you still find time to call here
Or send me a note?
Would you hold me when I'm cold
Or lend me your coat?
Or on special occasions
let me hold the remote?

....... unfinished, I'll come back to it.

 

[cherub]

I loved it ,, finished or not.... definately a piece from the heart.............. and you never know unless you try

good luck!

 

[skjalff]

I definitely like! seems very sincere and emotional. I like a hint of a 'comic relief' in the end of each stanza, kind of contrasts the heavier lines, sort of like a voice of reason, combatting the poetic mood, very nice!


skjalff