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Irridescent Moments

E-girl

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The hours slip by,
And i'm still here.
Wiping down tables and counting dollar bills,
Hoping i can pay my rent,
Hoping that i'll make it through this night
without crumbling
Everyone is saying goodnight
And my feet hurt, my eyes are tired
All i can do is sigh
And i might as well suck it up,
Because i'll be back here in just a few hours
To do it all over again.
This last table orders another drink...
Won't they ever leave??
This guy keeps telling me stories
That i really don't give 2 shits about
His wife? girlfriend? is drunk
Geez, i must have brought her 8 glasses of zinfandel
They are part of this endless night with me.
So we sit at table 60 and start to roll silverware
Chat about how much money we made
And sip daiquiris.
You're long gone
And i can't wait to just get home and
slip into bed next to you.
There's that moment of the day that completes everything,
Sets it all right.
If i was a few dollars short, or a little less sane,
You are that moment,
That irridescent moment of my night
where i have peace,
Where i dont even notice the throbbing pain in my legs,
Where my weary eyes cant even close,
Because they are caught in rapture of you,
Crystally blue eyes blinking back at me
From your side of the bed.
You look at me,
And i want to do is cry.
Something inside of me just trembles,
And i dont know if its good or bad...
i just know that its so strong,
So committed.
I cant barely make it up the steps
And peel the clothes off my body
But my heart just races at the thought of seeing you,
And i can't fall asleep unless its in your arms.
All my miserable moments tonight vanish under your mysterious gaze,
And all i'm left with is the irredescence
Of your presence,
Filling my heart like a million stars fill the night sky.
I said i wouldn't spend any more sleepless nights
at this damn computer,
But i think perhaps this is an exception...
I have to capture this irridescent moments,
So that i have them, always
To look back upon.
So i struggle to type out what is a thousand feelings,
And not nearly enough words
To describe how wonderful,
how perfect
you make everything in my life.
 
Dayum. I really like the gritty realism you inject into this work, because it kind of brings a hard edged light to the scene you describe. Its like seeing it through your eyes, because you've seen the same thing a thousand times before, and yet you think its worthy of description.
Nice work!
-plaz out-
 
I with plazama I love the description how you have written this and i love the end that made me smile girl!
* such a gift when the person you have in your life mades everything perfect no matter what*
:) :) :) :) :) :)
 
i was archiving, and i stumbled upon this, and i just had to smile, because i still feel this way about him, and its such a great feeling. i've never had a relationship quite like this one, where 8 months into it, we still LIKE each other... i mean, couples fall in love all the time, but LIKING someone is so different... its like, still getting to keep the great friend i made in him.
i have written so many poems about him, but never shared any of them with him. i'm thinking about emailing this one to him. i think it describes so wonderfully how i feel about him.
 
i think i'll just papaphrase plaz and pass humbly on; i realy like the gritty realism of this piece, it's seductive because it lacks pretension.
 
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