Invective

[spinkle]

Invective

Now emerging honesty becomes becomes a complaint
breaking vows to seem serene and composed
still enough to explore composition
chemical makeup more curious
than admissions of guilt set minor against all other moments
meaning nothing if explained
thus this demonstration of damage
factuality of depth no longer in question
not asked but backed into exposure
expounding lately becoming less certain
drained from the length and dried from the thinking
not clever but informally twisted
apparent nothing has yet ceased to have effect
not corrupt unaware of having shifted
entering a new state deemed final
though apt to change gauging contempt
digging as far down as able to breathe
choking on the worry toward total collapse
lurching through cels critical of animation
made too rigid to remain real
withholding a fragment of expression
failing finally to fulfill the vision
recognized early enough to poison
the progression grasped and developed
as having taken hold comfortably
settling in for new phases as they appear
attempting to return slowly enough
to satisfy the suspense of each moment
transforming routine into suddenly explosive
twirling tendrils in locks seduced to open
(escaping incorrect if not captive)
rolling hard into walls
coming down deaf from concussion.

 

[Noodle]

word to the bird

 

[spinkle]

heh...wtf made you decide to bump this, of all pieces??

 

[Noodle]

I was browsing through back pages and this spoke to me: now.

*shrug*

Did you double up becomes on purpose, or was that a happy artifact you left behind Bob Ross style?

 

[-|Twiztd|-]

sensational visions:

 

[cherub]

Great stuff babe, I never seem to have enough time to respond to stuff but i am trying,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, thanks noodle for Bumping, a good one to not be missed !

 

[spinkle]

thanks cin and twiztd =) i miss writing like this i'll admit it's not the easiest style to follow.

Noods...the becomes is a transcription artifact. unfortunately i failed to fit in any happy little trees.

 

[sourlemone]

Invective
expounding lately becoming less certain
drained from the length and dried from the thinking
not clever but informally twisted
...
transforming routine into suddenly explosive
twirling tendrils in locks seduced to open
(escaping incorrect if not captive)
rolling hard into walls
coming down deaf from concussion.

wonderful rhythm, especially in those three lines ^^ up above, the emphasis on 'drained' and 'dried' really helps evoke that 'informally twisted' state of mind - sound wonderful when read out aloud, as poetry should! brilliant

those last five are spectacular too, wonderful metaphoric imagery, seems to express itself more vividly the more I read it - again, how great poetry should! superb piece of writing, thoroughly enjoyed it

 

[Pure_XTC]

unfortunately i failed to fit in any happy little trees.

Bob Ross