:insomniak:

[Raz]

:it's the rubber johnny sound of
fingers dragging across the tight balloon
of your consciousness
eyes boring holes
deeper into the yawning black:

:you've invented too much
for your mind to want
there's no way to slow down
no way to stop
the sweat comes now
and the bedsheets stick
there is no comfort
you're vaguely sick
you're tired but simultaneously
wired awake
sleep is an idea
that just won't take:

:your claustrophobe skull
grows wounds and anxiety
until daylight comes
to steal the night one more time
from the insomniak:

 

[Mehm]

sik

love the form and idea. you describe the feeling well.

 

[New]

Sounds like my kind of sleepless night. Quite gritty, something you have a gift for.

 

[Dastrix Slogan]

Every line feels powerful, and true. I know I've been there a lot lately. Your writing has matured a lot since I've last been here Raz, it's very very impressive!

 

[up all night]

^ Yes! I was just thinking the other day how much you've progressed as a writer over the past few years. It's amazing, Raz. Very inspiring.

 

[Raz]

Thanks y'all! :D

 

[sunflash876]

tight shit man, I dig it

 

[CHiLD-0F-THE-BEAT]

Amazing and so descriptive. Loved it.

 

[drugfukkdrockstar]

Wow - that was really awesomely written.

I look forward to reading more pieces from you Raz. Good work!

 

[lady grey]

This gave me chills from a sense that i relate but more from your writing. I'm going to write this out and put it on my wall. Thank you, you are a brilliant writer Raz.

 

[psycosynthesis]

Nice poem man. The last stanza has the most powerful resonance.

 

[Jabberwocky]

+1 .