Incredible Roar

[crazynate:]]

Moving on in the middle of a sound,
gripping tighter, quickness fades into a drowned,
Lost soul, one heavily portrayed,
as a magnifying obstacle set forth... everyone's amazed.
Shades bring in darkness, clouding visions brightly contoured,
as a bundle of beauty crowded with menaces relentless to skewer,
Leaving no chance at survival, in a dependent world on a loan,
risking every valid guidance, forcing independence barely known.
Strength becomes a weakness, as a mind can plainly see,
it's not one but a shimmering cry of remorseful, dire need.
Send loud a signal asking now, to pull yourself together and stop wondering how.​

 

[lolz]

cool

 

[swilow]

I like this a lot esp-

"Strength becomes a weakness, as a mind can plainly see,
it's not one but a shimmering cry of remorseful, dire need.
Send loud a signal asking now, to pull yourself together and stop wondering how."

I'd remove the last line...But great stuff there, really flowssss

 

[crazynate:]]

thankxya!

I'd remove the last line...But great stuff there, really flowssss

I thought about it after reading your advice BUT I cant... I was kinda depressed with my whole drug "problem" and it kinda fits with the meaning I had for the poem. "send loud a signal asking now, to pull yourself together and stop wondering how" (I know I have a problem and know how to fix it but can't pull myself together because I'm too weak) basically what that says, heh