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breakyaself

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I need to do a little work on this one.. but im so shocked im actually writing again... seriously..





Long, crooked, scaled
Shapes of keratin – demented
A ring of diamonds,
Emaciated or still juvenile ?
Don’t answer too quickly,
Ageing.

Never ending
It seems to be
The length of cartilage.
That bump id pay
$5,600
To go and seek another slope to destroy
Ego.

I almost despise what brings me
Discounts, jeering, smiles, instant acceptance
Want a beer , love ?
Ill-fitting cheap garments
Don’t accommodate for that part of my personality,
Milk me.

Its so round that the Thai’s
They want to touch it and caress it
As if it were a newborn
They think it’s a foetus
If only they knew it was closer to a still born.
Depending on mood
My reaction is variable
Based on that little misunderstanding

Concise ?
More like…short.
So dented you could mistake it
For your first car
Thanks Andy, that isn’t a bruise !
No not Purple Rain !
Lets say “veins”
Wider than that that is blessed for childbirth.
Chicken killers unite ! Would be proud
Of such a fleshy prize.
 
i like this part.

Its so round that the Thai’s
They want to touch it and caress it
As if it were a newborn
They think it’s a foetus
If only they knew it was closer to a still born.
Depending on mood
My reaction is variable
Based on that little misunderstanding

the last part made me frown and slightly sad, so there power in there cant wait to see the finished product
 
You should definitely keep writing!

Love the chaos of this, the glimpses, the human touches, the fact that it is the way that it is...
 
im not entirely sure what ALL of it means, but i read the whole thing. (thats saying a lot, cuz usually i get 1/2 way thru most of the poems i read before i get bored)
 
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