ice in me

[skjalff]

Toxicity of my thoughts poisons the mind
Stare though empty is filled with icicles
no pain no hurt, but no dreaming either
blackness of sleep reminds of the goal
the one, the only, the most exalted purpose
blackness to take, embrace the tranquility
why did you have to go? end the summer
white darkness of frost, ice in your veins
You showed me that snow will no longer melt
not ever. it will stay right here in my eyes
and NEVER is the word
word of despair, cold hand of reality
binding to solid, melting the deceiful
NEVER to comprehend, cursed fault of mankind
Good-bye and know that I'll see it too some day
the blackness you embraced so willingly.



skjalff

 

[skjalff]

had 7 views, 4 of which are my own.. three people have seen it?

 

[neverwas]

Good-bye and know that I'll see it too some day
the blackness you embraced so willingly.

this peice confused me...whether it was the confusion of the peice itself or whether i just didnt undrstand the gist of it...there seemd to be a lot emotions there. they were easily picked up through its style and writting. well done.

just some advice...the veiws and replies is only an idication of how many people read ur work and how many people actually reply. dont take it personally if people dont reply to ur work. it doesnt mean theres anything wrong with it.

a lot of people read peices and dont feel the need to reply. i am one of those. i read a lot of peices and really only reply to the ones i think need replying to. there are quite a few of these people around. so dont stress over it.

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