I cry

[Melissa8579]

She needs
To be the center of attention
She needs
To have evryone under her thumb
She needs
To get everything she wants
She needs
To be loved by everyone
She needs
To drink her problems away
She needs
To take pills to sleep
She needs
To sleep all the time
She needs
To find her home
She wants
To end her own life
She says
"I can't take it any more"
She lives
Each day as it comes

She dies a little more every time I cry...

 

[neverwas]

i like this...nice work hun

 

[MisterPoetry]

This was very good, you wrote this well.

She needs
To take pills to sleep
She needs
To sleep all the time

That was fierce! Grabbed my attention immediately. From that point on, it was as if you wrote this about me using she instead of he. I could relate to the pain in this I could "feel" your words completely. and the last line, wow. great read!

 

[Melissa8579]

Thank you I appreciate your feedback!!!

 

[neverwas]

She dies a little more evert time I cry...

i actually re-read this just now...kind of because i have been living this peice for the last week...it describes the thoughts goin through my head and my life...

and ive already replyd and it is a good peice...but this line really stuck out at me when i read it this time through...