had to get away

[colicolo]

Where would you go?
When there is nothing left to hide
Alone, naked and fully exposed
Tired and dried out at the end of the ride

Swimming in their smiles whilst drowning in you’re painful guilt
Your feet are bruised as your soul was stolen
The emptiness filled the void as hope flowed out
The deep cuts inside were just the start of the ball rollin’

Who knew she loved you?
Would you have really cared?
You had packed all you needed and booked your trip away
Would you have stayed even for her?
Even for one more day…

You said you’d found the answer but you left behind all the questions
And in the a letter so long and open there was so much you failed to mention

Who knew she loved you?

I never even asked​

Would you have really cared?

I never stopped at all​

You had packed all you needed and booked your trip away
Would you have stayed even for her?

I had to go away​

Even for one more day…

I had to get away​

You can’t come back and now she is trapped, stuck so immersed in her head
Your too far away and have no reason to care that your death left her for dead

She drove herself wild trying to find you
She was convinced you weren’t far away
She could you feel you in her heart
Her love so strong drove her mind astray

There was nowhere else left to go
Nothing but emptiness left to breathe
Not even she could have saved me
The darkness was choking, I had to leave

Who knew she loved you?

What can I say​

Would you have really cared?

I couldn’t stop at all​

You had packed all you needed and booked your trip away
Would you have stayed even for her?

I had to go away​

Even for one more day?

I had to get away…​

 

[katmeow]

I like how you've played around with the layout of this.

The repetition of the questions is quite effective too

 

[(Wordy)]

I like the layout too, and the question / answer format... especially the fact that the "answers" aren't "straight answers", more like the call and response in a gospel song, or the strophe / anti-strophe of a Greek chorus.

 

[colicolo]

I like how you've played around with the layout of this.

The layout in the piece was quite integral to the vision of different voices. The repetition emphasises the stuborness and defines the integrity of the one who 'had to get away'.

i still cant decide if its a true story or not... writing was an easier way of having an argument that i never got to have