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Noodle

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sitting beneath the sky
heavy gray
soot floating
dust motes gathering
water redies to fall
on this our human place
designed some by us
our perception
of a realm
beyond words
and all the symbols,
pictures
we have framed,
contained.
 
Any responses to this at all would be most appreciated. I do care.
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later
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noodle...i know u care
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my favorite is pictures we have framed , contained...is the water a symbol representing renewal? i miss you already!! live long and prosper
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jill
ok, i like the idea of reality and our perception of this world, larger than symbols or words...i always feel like we all live in our own realities, created inside our heads, perception is everything...
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Alas a Noodle Poetry, so worth the wait, so worth the anxiety of what the future transforms into present.
(I'm not responding to the poem yet, want to dwell on it a while first..and keep the thread bumped to the top between now and then)
Loads of loves,
-Amina
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on this our human place
designed some by us
Noodle,
This beautiful poem of yours flows like a full-length version of a sweet Zen Haiku.
The above quoted lines, remind me of a song, neither title nor author of which I remember, but the chorus sings, "And Nigel thinks he's happy, cuz he's happy". It's about a fellow human being, with a good job, a good family, a nice car, a nice house, and a little bit of money saving up after all the bills have been paid. And he thinks he's happy because he has fitted himself into the mold of a successful man designed by the powers that be. aka government, media, pop culture...etc.
pictures
we have framed,
contained.
This last paragraph to me is almost comical in a sad way. I'm reminded of all the things, physical and abstract, thoughts, past-present-futue, anything and everything, we THINK we own, but actual they own us. I'm reminded for change and a need to be free.
Thank you for your beauty.
Loads of love,
-Amina
To me, the last word of your poem is where I find hope. "Contained". Identification of a 'problem' is enroute to solving it. Freedom. Hmmmmm
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[This message has been edited by HakunaMatata (edited 10 October 2000).]
 
Thankyou for the feedback. It means a lot to me. And, I am glad that you enjoyed it.
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Noodle, what's YOUR meaning behind your poem? And why does it mean so much more to you than anything you've posted before?
Loads of loves,
-Amina
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This one is about a feeling. The feeling is hard to describe, to pin down exactly. It does however feel like a gray sky time in my life right now.
I would rather not say anything more.
This piece should stand alone.
 
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