fuck you (for no apparent reason)

[onetwothreefour]

i am not afraid of God
this is where we differ
when i spend my days on my knees
it's because of
my foibles;
neuroses;
and all the rest of the
prescribed excuses

(i have a book:
exquisite names
make the best of lies)

you?
you're just on your knees

i know, i speak as if elevated
equal in some way with that
vast unknown
but We all know i'm happy
and bliss is ignorance...

...at least i think that's how it goes

 

[(Wordy)]

Biting... knowing... cool.

I love your work!

 

[up all night]

Great work, brad. The message is simple and perfectly executed. Great to see you posting in here again. I've missed you.

 

[onetwothreefour]

i still read here sometimes, i just try not to post

 

[(Wordy)]

i still read here sometimes, i just try not to post

Why is that?

 

[Mary Poppins]

^ he's too cool for bluelight

nice stuff brad - cuts straight to the relevant organs

 

[grey kat]

very cool
i dig cat!

 

[RareForm]

commendable, really. i'd began to think you were a sybarite. :D

 

[onetwothreefour]

Why is that?

the obvious reasons.

wait, is this a subtle bump of my own post.

no, i don't normally feel up to the standard. sometimes i do: i like this piece quite a lot; don't even remember writing it.

 

[Mehm]

its kind of weird. i like it

 

[Strawberry_lovemuffin]

no, i don't normally feel up to the standard. .

join the club... I am getting braver though. And haven't come across a comment that's made me cry yet I don't think criticism is allowed now unless asked for. I like that.

I like the poem too - especially "You? You're just on your knees." *whip* sharp as a tack, that line. V. nice.

 

[Raz]

I like the poem too - especially "You? You're just on your knees." *whip* sharp as a tack, that line. V. nice.

I agree.

I think the piece in general has a kind of simmering anger that I haven't seen in other stuff you've written...I like it.

Also, I encourage the both of you (I am talking to y'all, SLM and 123etc) to post your shit here as it can be no more self-indulgent than mine, and I am one of the mods here...and crap and awesome are both quite subjective and you will only receive comments that are constructive.

 

[colicolo]

i think its clever and bold. fascinating stuff