For One Day

[wastedwalrus]

“For One Day”

For one day we should act as fools
And ignore all this fruitless logic.
We shall live as if we’ve died
And heave ourselves towards the final touch.

We will pay no attention to this world.
We will slip slowly down that gentle slope.
We will find ourselves in each other,
And will never care to wander back.



I just found this and I'm certain it was written when I was thirteen or fourteen. Anyways, open for criticism as usual (hopefully we'll reach a point where I don't even have to say that ).

 

[mikeo14]

It makes sense man, it does indeed make sense

 

[colicolo]

I've been a fool all my life. But never felt that.

Another Great Write, Wal

 

[New]

Sounds like the hopes of a radical dreamer. I think I was like that at fourteen, too.

 

[privatecaller]

would (will) read again lol.

 

[IXinX]

I enjoyed that.
Being told what its like. At that age that's what we all try to do.
In diaries, but now its myspace i guess.

 

[katmeow]

Great perception for one so young.

It reads like someone with an old soul.

 

[Jabberwocky]

i enjoyed the tone of it the seamingly uninterupted thought process with no structured impedimus. It seems as time and lessons learned acrue we aquire a panel of voices in which vie for our attentions and reactions. Which at times can change the tone of poetry and can also make it seem as thought the writting has two voices or two sections. this was pure and it was refreshing if not simpilistic. which in itself is a breath of fresh air.