Fallen

[Dastrix Slogan]

my dreams have left
stolen away in the moonlight
boarded silver crested sultans fleets
and sailed away on ice blue seas
while i slept
a pauper under palace walls

there is hard dry white stone now
there is nothing in this childs pop-up book
nothing except the lone card cut-out
forced to stand sore thumb between bleached pages
pages devoid of verse or image

watercolour prince where is your battle now?

often i would awake
to the voices of thousands
calling my name
beckoning
purpose percieved
rising slowly over red dunes

now their silence is my dirt pillow
i sleep tonight so that tomorrow
they may forget me a little more
recognise me a little less
let them rather pass another drunkard
asleep on the stone street
than see how i have fallen
than see how i have failed

heaven hide the shame
should these rags be cleaned
to the purple and yellow silk
that once flowed at my side

let me be
kind sir
i am no longer the man you seek

 

[katmeow]

my dreams have left
stolen away in the moonlight
boarded silver crested sultans fleets
and sailed away on ice blue seas
while i slept
a pauper under palace walls

The image you use in your writing is so vivid, I can always picture it perfectly in my mind.

now their silence is my dirt pillow
i sleep tonight so that tomorrow
they may forget me a little more
recognise me a little less
let them rather pass another drunkard
asleep on the stone street
than see how i have fallen
than see how i have failed

Loved it

Great work.

 

[Frosty da snowman]

let me be
kind sir
i am no longer the man you seek

I dig this overall, but these are my favortie lines. Excellent work

 

[up all night]

This was honestly wonderful, vivid, beautiful work.

For some reason, this line:

watercolour prince where is your battle now?

... sent my mind into a flurry of activity. I found it very evocative for some reason.

 

[neverwas]

this was amazing

i love your work! it only increases each time i read things by you

let me be
kind sir
i am no longer the man you seek

...ilike battles in books and movies. this amde me think of a lonely, old solider wondering down the streets avioding peoples questions.

loved it

 

[cherub]

Lovely darlin, completely impressed with this piece.
Moving and sentimential and strong yes STRONG is a good word for it... very much like you

 

[titania]

Dastrix i love your writing...theres something really special about it!