Easier Said...

[DeirdreScott]

One
Just one
look from his eyes
and I will
s
i
n
k

But
when, oh when
silly girl will you
begin to
t
h
i
n
k
?

Think
to yourself
"maybe perhaps
it is too
good to be
true...."

Think
out loud
maybe, just maybe
he is
lying to
you

I know
Know you don't
want to cry

But you
YOU know
that tears are better
far better
than living in
a lie...

release
just let him go
with those pretty words
that from his tounge
d
r
o
p
p
e
d
.
.
.

Forget
just forget
the way that
he made your
heart
just

....stop....

 

[Mary Poppins]

wow. at first glance, i thought this poem might annoy me because of the structure....but i really really liked it.

i think it's laid out (now that i've read it ) in a very convincing style that echoes the way the mind works very well.

nice work

 

[DeirdreScott]

Thanks. I didn't like the form too much when I wrote it out on paper, but after steping back into the mind of a reader instead of a writer, I thought that it really did get the point across much better than a much more simply structured poem.