Each Other

[New]

I turn and bleed to show my strength
To hide the weakness from his eyes
My dagger nestled in my hand
To cut the woven bond of lies
I've no emotion for this horror
This terror's not to go away
I only see an execution
An executed save today
He knows my drops
Records my gains
Knows my loves
Drives me insane!!
Rivalry real, unfortunate bond
I've shifted my eyes in your bars for too long
We've met the same fates
From each other's curse
to find who I hate,
who I know is the worse

 

[Mehm]

I really like the alternation between regular and italic type. Its like you're talking to yourself, then out loud. Also, I wonder who this other person is..your father perhaps? great piece

 

[colicolo]

wow. this is really aggressive and firery. your expression is well developed and the furry of this piece is oozing from each word. well done on an awesome write.

 

[realm]

I like this one. I especially like the lines

"I only see an execution
An executed save today"

Good work.

 

[New]

Thanks guys. It seems I nailed what I was going for, and all the compliments are appreciated.

And no, I had no one in mind except two strangers when I wrote this piece.

 

[doofqueen]

great ryhming!